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Love

by joanie 

Posted: 24 February 2005
Word Count: 12
Summary: A haiku for soulmates everywhere!
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a microsecond
of your deepest thoughts and dreams
mirrored in my soul






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The Walrus at 22:13 on 24 February 2005  Report this post
This crystalises a powerful emotion. As you say, for soulmates everywhere. A splintered moment of vervant hope and perhaps belief.

Christina
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joanie at 22:15 on 24 February 2005  Report this post
Thanks for your response, Christina! Much appreciated.

joanie
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jewelsx at 18:47 on 26 February 2005  Report this post

very beautiful

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Account Closed at 18:51 on 26 February 2005  Report this post
Wonderfully romantic, Joanie - loved it. I'd get rid of that hyphen in the second line though. Not sure you need it, as I think it disturbs the flow.

:))

LoL

A
xxx
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joanie at 19:10 on 26 February 2005  Report this post
Thanks, jewelsx and HollyB!

Anne, I was including the hyphen as I thought (somewhere in the deepest recesses of my memory) that there had to be a break somehow in haiku at the end of the first or second lines..... I'll leave it out - I'm sure you're right.

Thanks!

joanie
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Account Closed at 21:26 on 26 February 2005  Report this post
Joanie - I think the rules for the Japanese official haiku are indeed very strict, but for the anglicised version because of the whole translation thing you can be more liberal. I don't want to be prescriptive though!! (but I do like it without the hyphen as now!!)

:))

LoL

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Beanie Baby at 16:25 on 01 March 2005  Report this post
Lovely!
Beanie x
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joanie at 17:18 on 01 March 2005  Report this post
Thanks Beanie!

joanie
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