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by roovacrag 

Posted: 24 February 2005
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I remember it well
the day we met
same with the day we went fishing

Iwore your cap
as I sat on your lap
lips oozing
with a whole lot of kissing.

I squealed at the maggots
you placed on my hook,
watched how you cast in
thought I could do the same.

My hook caught a tree
which embarrassed me
tried to be dignified
and rectify my dilemma.

You laughed all the day
and I really must say
I knew how much I loved you.

Eyes they did meet
Sapphire on Gold
arms wrapped around
a love untold.

Lifelong affair
which we did share
passion,love,an eternity.

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joanie at 14:47 on 24 February 2005  Report this post
Alice, this made me smile wistfully; I remember wearing my boyfriend's jacket (not cap) many years ago! You have painted lovely images of your memories.


paul53 [for I am he] at 19:21 on 24 February 2005  Report this post
I like the way you could evoke that special day, enabling us to be there as well.

roovacrag at 19:52 on 24 February 2005  Report this post
Joan, this was finding an old photo before I was married and it was a great day (Hate fishing as well lol)

xx Alice

roovacrag at 19:55 on 24 February 2005  Report this post
Paul53, I was just 18 then and a photo brought all the memories of that day.
What you do when your young and in love.

xx Alice

Brian Aird at 21:23 on 24 February 2005  Report this post
I love the way you've brought that first fishing trip and your obvious love to life. You made it easy for us to place ourselves in that moment - to share you emotions.

I'd say the poem might be better for having fewer verses, but if you intended just to share that day with us - it certainly worked.

You said 'love untold' - yet it blossomed into a lifelong afair and were not your passionate kisses evidence enough on that day? Anyway, you've got me wondering who was saphire and who was gold!

Nice evocative piece - I enjoyed reading it.



Lawrenco at 06:31 on 25 February 2005  Report this post
A very ordinary tale of love innocent and carefree. I like the inclusion of precious metals and gem`s to describe your worth ,a touching piece.

roovacrag at 08:45 on 25 February 2005  Report this post
Brian many thanks for the comment. Yes it may be a bit too long.
My eyes are the sapphire and I looked into the gold.

xx Alice

roovacrag at 08:46 on 25 February 2005  Report this post
Patrick many thanks for your comments.

xx Alice

jewelsx at 18:57 on 26 February 2005  Report this post

what a lovely memory told in the form of a poem.

lips oozing
with a whole lot of kissing

I thought those lines were fantastic



roovacrag at 22:45 on 26 February 2005  Report this post
Jewels thanks for the comments.

Mr B. at 09:13 on 27 February 2005  Report this post
This is such a warm piece - a wonderful melodeous rhythm, with a genuine sense of playfulness. It's the little embarressments we remember most fondly.



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