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A Three Line Ditty
Posted: 14 February 2005
Word Count: 13
Summary: was about to explode into a plethora of words, when this three line ditty said no more please...
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Doubt ravages me,
Passions drive me
And then laziness hands me a cake.
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 dewey at 16:07 on 14 February 2005
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loving every part of it, starts dark ends light, the reverse of the day. It certainly lightened up my evening.
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 joanie at 16:09 on 14 February 2005
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Laura, I really like the brevity with a wealth of meaning. Excellent.
joanie
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The Walrus at 19:54 on 15 February 2005
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As Joanie says, brevity with a wealth of meaning. What I really like about it is how you've concisely spanned the spectrum between being driven to acceptance/resignation. It also works at a further level: victim/pursuer/conciliator. All in all, a tight, superbly-balanced poem.
The Walrus
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clarefromscotland at 21:47 on 15 February 2005
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Wonderfully succinct and it has that lovely bathos at the end. The sound of not taking ourselves too seriously! Great stuff.
Clare
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laurafraser at 08:43 on 16 February 2005
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dewey,
thank-you and I'm glad it did so!
joanie,
thank-you for your comment-much appreaciated
The walrus,
nice to have you back! and thank-you for your comments
clare,
havn't heard that word bathos for ages-thank-you for reminding me of it-beautiful little word isn't it? thanks for your comments
souchong
yey!
xlaura
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