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A Goth Valentine

by Zettel 

Posted: 12 February 2005
Word Count: 44
Summary: Affectionately

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A Goth Valentine

I'll buy you pure white roses and spray them deathly black

I'll burnish all my piercings, nothing will they lack

Our favourite darkest songs

Will stir black leather thongs

When from your job at Barclays, you finally get back.

Zettel 2005

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joanie at 11:16 on 12 February 2005  Report this post
Hi Zettel. I laughed out loud at the last line! Good one - I enjoyed it.


Zettel at 11:37 on 12 February 2005  Report this post
Thanks Joanie

A bit of fun


Mac AM at 14:27 on 12 February 2005  Report this post
Puts a whole new slant on corporate banking!

Thanks for the giggle.


Ticonderoga at 14:27 on 12 February 2005  Report this post
There's irony, bach! Clever, funny and pathetically true to life.



Zettel at 23:58 on 13 February 2005  Report this post
Mac and Ti - ta


jewelsx at 00:55 on 14 February 2005  Report this post
Great ending! who/what was your inspiration?

Zettel at 11:02 on 15 February 2005  Report this post

A delightful Goth couple that I know came to mind. Plus however doggerelly, it was a little way of saying love comes in many forms.

Glad you liked it.



The Walrus at 20:29 on 15 February 2005  Report this post
Subversion of expectations, always a good thing but, for me, last line, flips the wrong way. Think there's a better line there, somewhere.

The Walrus

Zettel at 11:30 on 16 February 2005  Report this post

I guess. But it's a bit of a throwaway anyway and I wanted to to go lighter rather than darker which would have been one way to pitch it. A few minutes to join in the fun rather than lovingly fashioned.



engldolph at 20:30 on 16 February 2005  Report this post
Hi Z

really good..love the twist at the end... the hidden leather of suburbia..

great first line.. the black from white..

yes, this is more than just a clever rhyme..


Zettel at 23:33 on 16 February 2005  Report this post
Thanks Mike


paul53 [for I am he] at 16:38 on 05 March 2005  Report this post
I liked this. I'd have liked it more without the bold type. Let the words themselves be bold - and they are.

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