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NO CALIBRATION REQUIRED

by TheGodfather 

Posted: 10 February 2005
Word Count: 87


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If my life was a well-timed clock tuned
by some master clocksman, never losing
time, never wasting ticks,or losing
them amid the counting, I might
make some use of this life.
Unceasingly they come, 360
degrees of ticking, too
many for any simple
mind to sift through,
to effectively calibrate
to efficiently control, to
use. With success a noteworthy
goal, the rusted top rung of the
ladder, a well-raked autumn yard, it
seems there would be someone to help us
all with this time and calibration nonsense.






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Lawrenco at 21:57 on 10 February 2005  Report this post
Very intersting poem works on many levels scientific and metaphysical.I like the idea of having a silhouette of an hour glass at the back of the poem ,as I feel it has a visual impact especially a concave and convex perspective.ie wanting to simulate time because of its positive values but also being caught up by it`s tyrany. Good piece really enjoyed it.

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like the change of format better still, nice one !

crowspark at 22:55 on 10 February 2005  Report this post
Is this what used to be called concrete poetry? (perhaps it still is - I don't get out much) It is very effective whatever. I also like the metaphysics.

Enjoyable poem.

Bill

TheGodfather at 05:39 on 14 February 2005  Report this post
Bill,

There is an element of concrete poetry in here. You're correct about the terminology. Lawrenco, something you said made me realize I could do the form this way. Brilliant stroke of thought you inspired. You're to be commended. Please accept my thanks. Glad you both enjoyed it.

TheGodfather

Mr B. at 08:46 on 14 February 2005  Report this post
What stood out for me was the use of language - the combining of mechanical and emotional. I think it's difficult to do, but is achieved in the piece.

I hadn't noticed the shape of the poem until I read the comments - neat touch! :)

Cheers,

Anthony


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