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Flesh

by BorderBound 

Posted: 03 February 2005
Word Count: 89
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Black chases thunder
Thunder always wins
If light might enter
The day must begin
But light might chase the darkness
Rid us of its corpse.
Thunder still sits sweetly
Smiling for its cause…

Hunger starves the naked men
Who sit so bare so lame so empty
Watch the skies for all its plenty
Forget the night brings only many-
More black clouds
The men
Still watch
As night comes
They had always thought
That it would be the hunger
That rids them off what they ought
To live off.






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Tuppence at 10:04 on 03 February 2005  Report this post
I like
sad & poignant
we can't imagine being in that situation
water shortages WHAT?
thank you
i will read more
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jewelsx at 00:54 on 04 February 2005  Report this post
i especially loved the first 2 lines they grabbed my attention and made sure i was hooked.

i like the whole feeling of light Vs Dark / Good Vs Evil, as portrayed in the lines below.

But light might chase the darkness
Rid us of its corpse

have you written more like this in relation to content, i would be interested in reading them

all the best

jewelsx
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BorderBound at 16:46 on 04 February 2005  Report this post
The novel that I have just finished writing is about light Vs darkness, as such..

i'll try and post some sections :)

cheers!
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Felmagre at 13:13 on 03 March 2006  Report this post
Came across this on today's random read. Have to say that whilst enjoy is probably the wrong word, I felt challenged and found it thought provoking.
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