 bluesky3d at 19:41 on 29 June 2003
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Ellie... this is amazingly poignant (perhaps it should go in the category of love?)
Andrew :o)
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Ioannou at 10:05 on 30 June 2003
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Ah, Ellie, this is great. Made my heart flip at the end with sadness. The way it starts off almost funny but then is tragic, and how it charts a whole life in the course of the poem. Love, Maria.
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olebut at 10:24 on 30 June 2003
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Ellie
it has everything humour and sadness and so true to life lovely words
David
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 Stacey at 11:38 on 30 June 2003
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Ellie, what a fantastic poem. Just as loannou mentioned, it begins with such lovely humour, but you turn it around with such success at the end, making it tragically sad.
Thanks, and well done.
Stacey.
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Ellenna at 17:16 on 30 June 2003
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stacey, maria, andrew and david... I am really so grateful for your responses ! thank you :)
ellie
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poemsgalore at 18:40 on 30 June 2003
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Yes, humourous, poignant, one disaster after another - with the final disaster being a bit hard to deal with. Wonderful stuff Ellena.
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 Nell at 21:30 on 30 June 2003
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Ellie, Ellie, I don't usually comment on poems but found my way here after you replied to my posting.
This caused me such a stab of recognition - I was that child, and the first part almost brought a tear.
The last few lines brought up goosebumps, and I have to go now and make a cup of tea before I do cry.
Best, Nell.
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Account Closed at 12:20 on 07 July 2003
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Beautifully crafted. The school age section brought back memories of being the last one picked for football/cricket teams etc. Ouch.
A thought about the last line. Rythmically, it felt a syllable or 2 too long, and I wondered about: "I'm the one you'll leave".
Steve
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Ellenna at 20:23 on 14 July 2003
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steve thank you..i think i kept the extra syllables to maximise the impending doom..but I am now going to walk around saying it and i think you may well be right..
(I am taking extra special note too as you think we may be related :) !) thanks very much for your comments Steve..
Ellie :)
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EmiliaDG at 11:29 on 21 July 2003
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What a beautifully written poem Ellie. Its so poignant and moving without ever being selfindulgent. Fantastic!
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Ellenna at 17:18 on 21 July 2003
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very appreciative Emilia..It's so good to know that the feeling has been picked up..thanks
Ellie :)
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Hilary Custance at 23:03 on 01 August 2003
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That was lovely and sad and funny without any self-pity. I liked the way it drew in so many other references. My head is now crooning 'You are the one' and my mind's eye has gone back to some alarming moments in childhood. I shall stop there tonight. Cheers, Hilary
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Barney at 20:35 on 18 August 2003
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Love this piece; reminiscient of Wendy Cope and just as good. Thanks for your company in Glroup III!
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Ellenna at 21:16 on 18 August 2003
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Barney thank you for your very generous and kind comment .. :)
Yes, who else can we enlist..?
Ellie:)
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roger at 08:03 on 21 August 2003
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Ellie, come here and let me cuddle you. You can be a winner, you can get over the bastard. Trust me, I'll help you!
Seriously though, Ellie, this is just about the sadest thing I've ever read. Oh dear, I'm going to cry.
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Ellenna at 08:26 on 21 August 2003
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OMG you guys!! this is the last thing I expected .. just goes to show..( I'll have a cuddle anyway Roger thanks lol)..
now where's that box of tissues?
but thank you Woz and Roger :)
Ellie
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 DJ at 08:54 on 21 August 2003
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Oh dear - between you and Woz I've been reduced to one heap of snivelling mess. Loved this - it struck many chords. This is an emotional start to the day...
DJ x
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Susan70 at 20:57 on 06 September 2003
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This is the best thing I've read on this website. I knmew I was right to read more of your stuff. I don't think it could be improved.!
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Ellenna at 08:41 on 07 September 2003
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Susan..your reaction has really made me blush. I am so glad you enjoyed it and I don't know what to say except thank you! :)
Ellie
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DJ thank you very much too. I am just so glad this poem has meant something to people..
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