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The Pin

by Ellenna 

Posted: 28 June 2003
Word Count: 86


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The Pin

light penetrated the dark of the curtains
held together by a pin
she stared at the shadowed form
that rose above her

disembodied she let her mind wander
who was this soul she had let into her darkened room
to plunder her body to sate an appetite
in the mere hope of chancing upon nirvana

they had come together from a lonely place
each hoping the other would provide the clue
but the closer their bodies touched the wider the
space between them grew






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bluesky3d at 20:19 on 28 June 2003  Report this post
'but the closer their bodies touched the wider the
space between them grew'

is a great couple of lines, and feels like it has always been there!

I feel this poem could equally well be called the pin.

The flimsy curtains of their insubstantial relationship are held together by a pin, which also keeps out the outside world, if only briefly.

Andrew :o)

Nell at 21:45 on 30 June 2003  Report this post
Ellie, another little gem, more goosebumps at the last line too. You have an original voice, and one that speaks volumes in a few lines. Thank you.

And I think Andrew is right about the title.

Best, Nell.

Ellenna at 12:40 on 19 July 2003  Report this post
The Pin it is !

Thank you ....just got round to changing things

Ellie




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