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skyblue2 at 17:41 on 07 March 2003
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I know what you mean but it made me uncomfortable as I could never give myself to anyone so completely and this made me very aware of that deficiency.
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Jibunnessa at 18:13 on 16 March 2003
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Hi to everyone who commented on this poem. I'm really glad you like it. And I can see why you might find it sinister, disturbing or uncomfortable. However, when writing it, I did so with a joyous heart and a big playful smile.
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llydstp at 11:18 on 16 April 2003
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I could not find anything sinister in this poem - but I am one of those people who thinks that obsessive love is perfectly normal.
I liked the poem a lot, except for 'Eyeballs;' this word made me feel uncomfortable. Perhaps this word is too anatomical for me.
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Jibunnessa at 23:45 on 16 April 2003
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No, I don't find anything really sinister about this poem either. It's NOT obsessive in a stalking sence. But more in the giving of yourself. I had great fun writing it - passion, surrealism and humour with a tinge of obsession ...with a smile.
Oh, and as for eyeballs being sinister... you've now drawn my attention to the fact that eyeballs recurr in my writing (check out: Shaquilla's Thoughts from 'Shaquilla's Papers'). Hmm... what does that say about me?
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Anna Reynolds at 10:00 on 23 April 2003
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Maybe sinister is the wrong word- more overwhelming, obsessive, all-enveloping... you know, that kind of thing. But beautifully expressed through the language and visual imagery. Yeh, but go easy on the eyeballs huh?
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Jibunnessa at 10:31 on 23 April 2003
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Not sure I can get away from eyeballs. They'll probably creep in somehow or other somewhere. Glad you like the visual imagery.
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roger at 10:51 on 23 April 2003
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Hey Jib,
Just came across this and think I can explain the 'eyeball' bit. It was a crumb, right? Chomped a bit hard and a crumb flipped up and got caught under the top eyelid, right?
Actually, I don't think I fully understood it (It's a Derby thing, nothing to do with the poem itself) because I couldn't find the sinister bit, but I thought it was funny. I mean that in the nicest possible way, got a sort of warm feeling from it and found myself smiling that silly sort of gormless smile you smile when something's amusing you in a nice, relaxed way. Have I screwed up again? Got it all wrong again? Oh well, I did like it and that's what matter's, isn't it?
Mind you, I do worry about you sometimes. Who on earth would come up with the concept of life being a jaffa-cake? And I though I was loopy. Rambling, aren't I. Not really helpful. Better go. Sorry.
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Jibunnessa at 11:00 on 23 April 2003
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Finally, somebody who understands the poem! But, not the crumbs flipping into the eyelids bit.
I too had a warm feeling and great big smile when writing it.
Glad you like it.
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roger at 11:40 on 23 April 2003
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Bloody hell, Jib...I got it right? I'll have to leave Derby now; where will I go?
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Jibunnessa at 11:45 on 23 April 2003
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They can't chuck you out. You don't have dual nationality!
...besides, after you've won the booker with your broken cats story, they'll soon call you back.
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Shadowgirl at 13:22 on 23 April 2003
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Jolly Fisherman's waiting with open arms Rog! Always be a bit of beach with your name on it here.
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Fearless at 15:54 on 21 August 2003
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Don't know what this means for my future relationships with jaffa cakes, but.....Woz
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