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haiku - Limbo

by jewelsx 

Posted: 20 January 2005
Word Count: 9
Summary: This is my first ever attempt at a Haiku - any comments would be more than appreciated.
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Dying a death
trapped within a limbo;
Eternal winter






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joanie at 19:49 on 20 January 2005  Report this post
Hi jewelsx, this is a lovely Haiku, as it encapsulates a moment.

The traditional pattern of Haiku is 5 - 7 - 5 syllables, so you have to decide if you want to stick to that.

It's only a matter of months since I first tried too! It's very invigorating - keep writing!

joanie
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jewelsx at 23:30 on 21 January 2005  Report this post
Thanks joanie,

I am still finding my feet in this medium - i am hoping practice makes perfect! Or at least i am going to enjoy the journey to perfection even if its never reached.

jewelsx
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Tuppence at 20:10 on 25 January 2005  Report this post
haiku i find hard to do but just starting
it's a challenge tho
go 4 it
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Tuppence at 20:13 on 25 January 2005  Report this post
5-7-5 syllables hard to do
used whole pad nearly
makes u think succinctly
maybe too structured i write freely
this may give me some discipline
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jewelsx at 23:23 on 25 January 2005  Report this post
Tuppence - i know how you feel i often tend to ramble on for as long as possible! So little room for manouvre in a haiku yet so much is expected.

Good luck to all of us

Jewelsx
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paul53 [for I am he] at 13:17 on 02 March 2005  Report this post
haiku hard, very
to do, just think like Yoda
easier will be
;)
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