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Now What?

by Jubbly 

Posted: 15 January 2005
Word Count: 162
Summary: Just a very short idea.

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There were at most half a dozen of them, all identical, flashy metal ribbons sprouted from the heads and their eyes stared wildly in shock. Oversized pale blue smocks concealed their body shapes and they clutched their belongings tightly to them with a fierce protectiveness. Several of them chatted and sipped bottled water, oblivious to their green and purple faces. All but one-barked instructions into compact mobile phones, the odd one out just peered at her watch, willing time to flow backwards. They should have been embarrassed by their situation like a naked dream as we watched their privacy become public but they seemed to have acquired an ‘in my car’ invisibility and couldn’t care less about us. What should have remained a secret was now out, now we all know how much hard work goes into their seemingly natural preparation. Yes, there’s nothing quite like a fire alarm going off in a beauty parlour to remind us we’re all just mortals

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Silverelli at 17:32 on 15 January 2005  Report this post
Haha. Julie. Nice punch at the end.
Similar to the lights going up in the bar at 3am and finding out you've been talking to Mr. Smith all night instead of Ms. Smith.

Account Closed at 17:48 on 15 January 2005  Report this post
Julie, I didn't have a clue what was going on here - till the end. Where do you get 'em? Hang on, it didn't happen to you, did it???


Dee at 18:00 on 15 January 2005  Report this post
Julie, I howled when I got to the end of this. Wonderful.

There’s a stray hyphen in here.


Jubbly at 19:07 on 15 January 2005  Report this post
Thanks, Dee, Els and Adam. It didn't happen to me directly but the alarm went off at Cannary Wharf when I was Xmas shopping in the big mall there and I witnessed it first hand. Hilarious.


joanie at 00:51 on 16 January 2005  Report this post
Hi Julie, just thought I'd have a look at something other than poetry for a change. Loved this. I was thinking (obviously) Science Fiction, then a surprise at the end. Excellent!


crowspark at 16:52 on 16 January 2005  Report this post
Hi Julie - funny ending - reminded me of a fire-alarm going off in a Manchester hotel one evening. A surprising number of towel headed women draped in men's overcoats filling the grand staircase. I don't know why they didn't have their own covers.

Great stuff.

bjlangley at 09:40 on 17 January 2005  Report this post
Hi Julie, this is fun. I didn't have a clue what was going on at first, I just couldn't see what the 'flashy metal ribbons' could be all about, whilst they were clearly human, so the punchline was all the more effective as the image became clear in my head.

All the best,


scottwil at 07:14 on 19 January 2005  Report this post
Very funny, Julie. I forced myself not to sneak a look at any comments or the last line 'til I got there.




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