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Have No Fear.

by Lawrenco 

Posted: 08 January 2005
Word Count: 173
Summary: I suppose a captivated period whilse out celabrating good will to all.I tried to be not too heavy on the punctuation to offer a more relaxed forum to find the readers own space as sugested by gard. Does it works though?


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Evervescently racey Stacey with her low cut obstinacy pours pints with almost modest display.
Her apointed curves give way to govial verve a twinkle buzz of sexuality.

"Ah! Not to look too hard" (only in search of golden heart).

Giving seasons peaceful offerings abound chattering with mates looking around seems universal merryment is crowned.

Somehow proud see losening stress.

Ska trumpet sounds catalyst found rhythn flows the trombone pointedly drowns.

To a message to a jewel like you people of every hue
talk tranquilly bacus juices beauty finds a thread.
I tread around speak to all around.
I meet west indian elder, hat with wide brim spins to his seat slightly taking it all in .
Carribean cigar leaf aroma mix to the night flavour.
Like an incensed natural finery to our symbolic nativity.

From a thoughtful buried head he looks up sudenly his precense expounds "have no fear" and says no more.

A present that resonates.........Unwrapping spent tears to wisdom here.

Drinking continues alas consences says lets move on to another pub.






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Mr B. at 19:34 on 08 January 2005  Report this post
Has a nice London local pub-type feel to it. The free-form style worked well as I was able to dip in and out on a variety of levels. Barmaids and Bacus don't feature together often! Loved the last three lines! Nice one!

Lawrenco at 11:12 on 09 January 2005  Report this post
Well done Anthony, the pub was in Tottenham;the Elbow rooms to be pecise on the High rd.
Yes possibly worn phrases Bacus/Barmaid ;have to watch out for that!
Happy you enjoyed my festive thoughts.

miffle at 14:20 on 09 January 2005  Report this post
Patrick, Loved the phrase 'unwrapping spent tears to wisdom here': humble. 'Effervescently racey stacey' quite a feat in terms of assonance and alliteration: acrobatic feel :-)

An unusual web of sound and image moving from lusty Carry On scenes to mythic and on to the next pub.

The encounter with the West Indian elder seemed to me to be worthy perhaps of it's own poem ? i.e. this is a scopey poem what might happen if you narrowed your focus? Or perhaps I am reading more significance into that encounter than there really was!

Wondered if you have read any John Betjeman? Discovered a book a little while ago full of London poems you might like to look them up.

All the best, Nikki





Lawrenco at 22:39 on 09 January 2005  Report this post
Hi Nikki, Many thanks for the positive comments ,assonance ,alliteration ;acrobatic feel:Thats also pretty cool like a reflection,could run forever !
Could be a good idea to macro the lens a little,focas on the meeting with the Elder fellow.Certainly I thought a moment of resonance as if he had a special message for me which he had these are moments that are inspirstional ,uplifting ,times that stay with you.

Bring them on!!!!!!!!!!

Good one Miffle!!!!!!


Lawrenco at 23:24 on 09 January 2005  Report this post
Hi Nikki, Many thanks for the positive comments ,assonance ,alliteration ;acrobatic feel:Thats also pretty cool like a reflection,could run forever !
Could be a good idea to macro the lens a little,focas on the meeting with the Elder fellow.Certainly I thought a moment of resonance as if he had a special message for me which he had these are moments that are inspirstional ,uplifting ,times that stay with you.

Bring them on!!!!!!!!!!

Nice one Miffle!!!!!!


The Walrus at 16:44 on 11 January 2005  Report this post
This is really quite an everyday scene, but somehow you elevated it into something magical with your interpretation of what perhaps lies beyond what you are observing. It also really hits the senses with its colour, sounds and aromas.

I like it!

The Walrus

Lawrenco at 06:54 on 12 January 2005  Report this post
Thanks Red.I never forget the the blake quote:"To see the world in a grain of sand".

gard at 20:41 on 15 January 2005  Report this post
Hi Lawrenco

forgot to say thanks for comment on my piece before. Happy New Year! Anyway, what a fab piece! A nice natural rhythm just slipped in when I read it. Like the first line, somewhat humrous. nice lot of assonance. Yes I agreee with Miffle, perhaps the Indian elder is worthy of poem itself?


Only crit is one or two spellings..

G

roovacrag at 21:38 on 16 January 2005  Report this post
Patrick, This could have been a pub in sheffield. Well written and brought a lot of thoughts to all.
Well done
Alicexxxxxxxx

Lawrenco at 20:46 on 18 January 2005  Report this post
Thanks Gard,i

<Added>

`m happy you found it to be an exhilarating piece i`m thinking about a sequel on the elderly fellow.-`I`ll check out the spellings.

Hi Alice,Happy New Year.Wherever you are it`s always good to have a pub with a good atmosphere!
All the best Pat.


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