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My eyes

by joanie 

Posted: 04 January 2005
Word Count: 18
Summary: a quickie
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My eyes are
pools of liquidlovelight,
seas of darkdreamdust
oceans of purepromisedpleasure
as I look
into your face.






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Don Gorgon at 20:06 on 04 January 2005  Report this post
That's sweet joanie. I like the way the eyes get bigger with each line, that's cool, and the 'three-in-one' words you've used seem to fit together naturally. All said and done, a lovely little quickie!

Peace and Love

Don
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joanie at 21:18 on 04 January 2005  Report this post
Thank you very much, Don. Much appreciated!

joanie
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poemsgalore at 18:36 on 05 January 2005  Report this post
A gorgeous, syruppy (is that spelled right?) piece, love it.
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joanie at 19:22 on 05 January 2005  Report this post
I don't care whether it's spelt correctly!! Thanks, poems.

joanie
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roger at 20:40 on 05 January 2005  Report this post
Ahh. Sweet, in the nicest possible way.
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joanie at 22:57 on 05 January 2005  Report this post
Thanks, Roger!

joanie
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Tina at 15:15 on 06 January 2005  Report this post
I liked it too - especailly the progression
thanks
Tina
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joanie at 18:43 on 07 January 2005  Report this post
Tina, thank you for responding.
joanie
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