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Cloud nine
Posted: 23 June 2003
Word Count: 64
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I’m on cloud nine
gone fuzzy inside
can’t see past here
nothing is clear
lets live this night
like there’s no other
just you and I
love is our cover
no one can touch us
we’re inside a bubble
she doesn’t know your here
you wont be in trouble
awaken your senses
and open your heart
for tomorrow,
once again
we will be apart.
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 poemsgalore at 18:48 on 23 June 2003
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Is the "She" who doesn't know he's here, the mother, wife or girlfriend? Depends on whether the person speaking is male or female I suppose, I liked this, but it can be interpreted in so many different ways. Would love to hear the true meaning of the poem Stacey.
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 Stacey at 19:02 on 23 June 2003
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Hi Kathleen,
Thank you for your comments. My intention was that it is a female talking to her male lover, and the 'she' referred to is the male lover's girlfriend. Hope that helps, thanks for taking the time to read my work.
Take care,
Stacey.
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poemsgalore at 19:06 on 23 June 2003
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I thought so, but after reading it a couple of times, realised there could be more than one meaning - which is good, as it keeps the reader guessing.
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olebut at 19:13 on 23 June 2003
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Isnt it perhaps ironic that the song of the same name was sung by The Tempations?
Stacey once again you have this nack of producing a poem which so succinctly describes a highly charged emotional experience.
congrats
take care
David
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Ticonderoga at 20:21 on 13 October 2003
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You really do have an amazing gift for concise, compact, intense honesty of expression. This is real poetry, capturing the essence of things, ulike my flatulent verbosity. You have a rare and special gift. Treasure it, and be proud.
Best,
Mike
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