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Invisible Me

by Polly 26 

Posted: 12 December 2004
Word Count: 71
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Im tired of all the lies
Which cause me to agonize,
With baffled tears of anguish
Creates an image that never seems to vanish.

My soul feels deplorable
Not auspicate nor appraised,
Just wishing to be adorable
And one day without being dazed.

The auroras dwindle by dread
Forget you all, Iím done with the grieve,
This is the final dimension Iíll endure distress
So long, this is my last vitality.






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miffle at 11:00 on 13 December 2004  Report this post
Welcome to Writewords Polly. I like the way that this poem double backs on itself i.e. by writing I think you make yourself visible. Look forward to more. Nikki NB what does 'auspicate' mean?

roovacrag at 14:28 on 14 December 2004  Report this post
Polly welcome to WW.

Agree with Nikki,cannot find auspicate only auspicious.

I liked the way you did each stanza.

Well done.

xx Alice

Polly 26 at 20:20 on 14 December 2004  Report this post
It means "to be warned" which in this case, in my poem, it means that I am not warned by people I love, or that love me, of bad things that head my way. That they know about.

x0x0 Thank You For The Comments. I enjoy criticism, it helps me correct my poem errors that I do not see.

-pOlLy-

roovacrag at 20:37 on 14 December 2004  Report this post
Polly...
Just looked at your profile and it says US.

You will spell different to us in the UK.

As I put the English word,you put the US WORD.
Thats where Nikki and I got it wrong.

Not to worry, you are young and will learn the English language very quick.

Take carexxxxxxxxxxx Alice

Darkpoet22 at 22:56 on 19 August 2006  Report this post
i like it its so deep and it shows what you really want in life. keep it up.

pagana


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