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Haiku-"Early Morning"

by Kay 

Posted: 02 December 2004
Word Count: 12

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Yellow ball,sunrise
Soft light breaks on the city,
A new day begins.

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joanie at 22:39 on 02 December 2004  Report this post
Hi Kay, this is lovely - positive.

I like it.


Account Closed at 11:55 on 03 December 2004  Report this post
Very optimistic piece with a great sense of calm beauty and things beginning. Lovely.

Should there be a space between "ball," and "sunrise"??



poemsgalore at 18:15 on 03 December 2004  Report this post
Although this has the classic calmness of a haiku, there is also a brightness implied by the sunrise. Exceptional,

Kay at 21:33 on 15 December 2004  Report this post
Thanks for kind comments. Yes I think there should be a space between "ball" and "sunrise"

jewelsx at 13:05 on 20 January 2005  Report this post
I found your haiku very easy to read, it has got a calming presence about it.

I look forward to reading some more


Tuppence at 16:47 on 22 January 2005  Report this post
lovely i only just started haiku so look 4ward to other work

paul53 [for I am he] at 13:30 on 02 March 2005  Report this post
enjoyed immensely
read more by you will I do
when I have the time

lieslj at 20:39 on 25 March 2005  Report this post
Hey, Kay,

Did we scare you away?

Do come back and play, Kay.

It's very much more fun that way!


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