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Tomorrow

by The Walrus 

Posted: 02 December 2004
Word Count: 122


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Tomorrow, the sea might swell tranquil or rudely crash,
the sky might decide cobalt or some dreary shade of grey,
the earth could shoot veridian or soak up bled red.

Tomorrow, Aids might be cured or replaced,
politicians may speak out of their mouths, instead of their arses,
and zealots may realise the fundamental commonalities
rather than the inconsequential differences.

Tomorrow, the price for adulthood might not be innocence,
‘us and them’ might substituted for ‘we’,
terrorism may be consigned to the history books,
warspeak made obsolete and peacemakers redundant.

Tomorrow, mankind might change, for better, or for worse.
God, Allah, Buddha, or Zeus may descend
to make us pay or give us another shot.

But that’s tomorrow.
And today, is today.







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joanie at 14:48 on 02 December 2004  Report this post
Excellent, Christina. Superb to read aloud. I like the change of feel and topic in each stanza and the almost personification of the elements in the first one. I love might decide cobalt.

I wonder if a line break right at the end instead of the comma after today might be effective. I don't know! I think it might make a pause more obvious.

I enjoyed this immensely.

joanie

Okkervil at 19:01 on 02 December 2004  Report this post
Woo, Walrus. Great poem! You'd think it'd sound optimistic, but I didn't think it did- more resigned to everything. Downbeat. Unless you wanted it to sound hopeful. In which case, it did! I swear! I loved the first stanza, 'specially the line Joanie voted for, though didn't get 'or soak up bled red' (typo or my stupidity?) and you've missed a 'be' from 'might substituted.' I think. But none of that hides the poetical brilliance!

Bye!

James

roovacrag at 23:35 on 02 December 2004  Report this post
Red,
brilliant poem and one I like very much.
I am not biased as some may think.
This was written with feeling and emotion.
Love how you put my favourite God in there,ZEUS.

Every stanza said something.
xxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxx Red mum



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