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The Ancient Artist

by John G.Hall 

Posted: 13 November 2004
Word Count: 84
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The Ancient Artist

One waking day of winter time
frost covered my faded book's skins
pages filled with the tracks of poems
perfect steps cracking under my eyes
extinct black and white animal scripts
painted on the walls of the minded cave.

Then morning beasts were bellowing outside
the stink of bloody sacrifice excited the fire,
we picked up the brush, we blew the colours
we made the signs, we chanted their names
one waking day of winter time we were made.


John G.Hall(C)2004






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Okkervil at 18:25 on 14 November 2004  Report this post
Excellent consonantage! Y'can really savour saying this. I loved the imagery, 'specially in the last half.

Just a thing: shouldn't books be book's? I'm a shakey 'postrophe user in the 'right' places, so I'm going out onna limb there. Also: 'minded'? Isn't there maybe a more... sacrosanct word to use? I thought 'minded' was a bit awkward. Jus' a thought.

Bye!

James


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