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Udder Cream

by neilwills 

Posted: 12 November 2004
Word Count: 68
Summary: Cosmetics don't always conceal
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My lad he's sharp and cool
On deadpan humour keen
And on my ex-wife's kitchen shelf
I spied a pot of cream.

Udder Cream the label said
A moisturiser pink
It keeps her skin from glowing red
Makes her younger so she thinks

A gag jumped unasked in my head
I didn't want to row
But William spoke my thoughts and said
Its stuff that's for a cow






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roovacrag at 16:07 on 12 November 2004  Report this post
Neil .Very funny poem.
I will check mine to make sure I get it right.
Can't stop laughing.
Brilliant.

Well done.

xx Alice
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The Walrus at 18:30 on 12 November 2004  Report this post
As Alice says, very funny poem. Really liked the tone and tight structure.

The Walrus
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neilwills at 19:15 on 12 November 2004  Report this post
Thank you both very much Alice and Christina. I'm very pleased you enjoyed it. This is my only 'pome'. Everything else is prose. Thanks again for comenting.
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Okkervil at 21:19 on 12 November 2004  Report this post
like The Walrus said, this has an excellent structure- y'lend y'self to poetry, methinks. I think rhyming poetry is great, especially when it works, no contrived rhymes or anything. Anyways, I thought it was fun!

Bye!

James
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neilwills at 21:56 on 12 November 2004  Report this post
Thanks also for reading it James and for the kind comments.
Neil
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juleschoc at 21:50 on 16 November 2004  Report this post
Funny..made me laugh..made me think...am I wasting my money lolol?

Jules
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bjlangley at 09:16 on 01 April 2005  Report this post
Great fun Neil,

all the best,

Ben
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