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Speaker for the dead

by Heckyspice 

Posted: 11 November 2004
Word Count: 105
Summary: On the day of remembrance, I felt compelled to write this.


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In their proud company, I am not ashamed.
I am the speaker for the dead.
Even though my voice is a whisper, you can always hear me.
Every step, every bullet, every prayer said in the mud is never far from me.
Look on my face, be it marble or granite and you will see the face of boys and men.
Lost forever from this world but standing together in the twilight.
At this time of year new comrades join us, as each poppy is laid down.
One by one they come to join the company of heaven.
And they no longer feel the cold.






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poemsgalore at 18:22 on 11 November 2004  Report this post
Very moving, and excellently written with pride, dignity and love.

joanie at 18:27 on 11 November 2004  Report this post
Heckyspice, this is excellent. It would be beautiful read at a memorial service. I love the last line - short, simple and very effective.

I wonder if the two 'always' in line 3 would be better if one were changed?

joanie

Heckyspice at 08:24 on 12 November 2004  Report this post
Hi Poems and Joanie,

Thank you for the comments. I do not really understand poetry so I was not sure how this would appear. It was something that I had to write and I guess that maybe is the crux of all poetry.

Joanie, you have a good point about line 3, it would have been better to leave out the second always.

Best wishes,

David

Dee at 11:05 on 09 January 2005  Report this post
David, this just appeared in the random read. What a beautiful, moving and thought-provoking poem it is.

Lost forever from this world but standing together in the twilight.
This line sent shivers down my back.

Personally, I’d take out the first ‘always’. The second one gives the line more weight.

Dee


Heckyspice at 08:15 on 10 January 2005  Report this post
Hi Dee,

Thanks for the comments. I have now taken out the first 'always' as suggested by yourself and Joanie. The line does have more resonance with it removed.

Best Wishes,

David


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