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New Lipstick Kiss
Posted: 04 November 2004
Word Count: 68
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New Lipstick Kiss
Unopened
Unwrapped
Luscious temptation as the cellophane uncrinkles
sweet sensation as the packaging pops
With nimble extraction of colourful distraction
you push off the lid
and twistingly expose the phallic abstraction
of tumid crimson grease
Softly, gently, sensually
you press me to your lips
caressing them with silky tenderness
exhuming the consummate passion within
Replenished, I am returned
until you yearn for me again
CS
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 laurafraser at 09:23 on 04 November 2004
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brillant, sensually subtlely erotic-very Lolita-esq
perfect choice of words that creae vivid imagery for the reader
i really enjoyed this-clever poem
x laura
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 joanie at 11:01 on 04 November 2004
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Carlton, lovely! A delicious feeling of anticipation as you open a new one and there is something wonderfully sensual about a new one. Mmm... I liked it.
joanie
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roovacrag at 19:50 on 04 November 2004
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Carlton,very sensual and so erotic. Will now look at my lipstick with different eyes.
Well done.
xx Alice
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Tuppence at 20:40 on 04 November 2004
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lovely babe never use make up xept rocky horror show!! wish someone would yearn 4 me again
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Carlton at 09:40 on 05 November 2004
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Thanks for the comments ladies. Never bought or opened one myself, but was fortunate enough to be lipsticked before a kiss the other week by a beautiful girl:-}
Glad you liked it.
Carlton
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Account Closed at 20:03 on 05 November 2004
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Hey, a wonderful modern sonnet! I'd be tempted to play it a little more and do 3 stanzas - an 8, a 4 and a 2 - but hey that's just me, and it's good - no, great - whatever you do.
Spicy and erotic and colourful! Not sure about "turgid" though - it hangs heavy in the froth of fantastic imagery here - what do you think?
LoL
A
xxx
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Carlton at 21:07 on 05 November 2004
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Yeah, I see where you're coming from with the stanzas, after thinking about it for a bit!! Agree, wasn't sure about turgid either, but being a bit of a landscraper, other words don't come easily to mind. Guess I should use the old thesaurus a bit more.
Wasn't too sure about grease either, but couldn't think of any other way to describe the stuff that lipstick is, not being a user and all.
Must admit, didn't mind wearing it!!
Carlton.
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Thanks H
Yeah, I see where you're coming from with the stanzas, after thinking about it for a bit!! Agree, wasn't sure about turgid either, but being a bit of a landscraper, other words don't come easily to mind. Guess I should use the old thesaurus a bit more.
Wasn't too sure about grease either, but couldn't think of any other way to describe the stuff that lipstick is, not being a user and all.
Must admit, didn't mind wearing it!!
Carlton.
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OK now I see how this works
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