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RLG 11 - Diversity

by joanie 

Posted: 02 November 2004
Word Count: 90
Summary: My attempt


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For a big man,
my brother had
exceptionally small toes.

As a woman,
I have often
tried to denigrate all those

who appear
to me quite
different, I suppose.

Though a child,
my daughter
had the air of one who knows

that everyone
has oddities
for others to expose.

For a small world -
and it’s changing
as I’m speaking, as it grows,

There will always
be the ones who
have the high times and the lows.

For a big man,
my uncle had
a very tiny nose………..

SO WHAT?






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James Anthony at 18:56 on 02 November 2004  Report this post
Excellent! I really enjoyed that. THe line is lending itself to poetry a lot I see.

It really ticks along and it's like your not reading it, almost feels like an easy thought as i was reading it.
Enjoyed it loads

joanie at 19:17 on 02 November 2004  Report this post
Thanks James. Very much appreciated. I don't know about lending itself to poetry - I usually write poetry anyway!

I am very interested to know that you think it 'ticks along'. I like my poetry to be like that, if possible.

Glad you liked it.

joanie

Jumbo at 19:23 on 02 November 2004  Report this post
joanie

I liked the repeated form of this - and the coming back to the same rhyme at the end of each three lines.

Very clever!

All the best

jumbo


joanie at 19:25 on 02 November 2004  Report this post
Cheers, Jumbo!

joanie

Account Closed at 19:41 on 02 November 2004  Report this post
Joanie,
i liked the conclusion! It's amazing how this line is flexible. Lovely rhythm - it flows naturally.

Elspeth

joanie at 19:45 on 02 November 2004  Report this post
Thank you Elspeth. I really do appreciate your response (at the risk of being very repetitive)!

joanie

bjlangley at 09:39 on 03 November 2004  Report this post
Joanie, I like this. Impressed that you managed to use so many words rhyming with toes without it ever coming across as being forced.

All the best,

Ben

Okkervil at 15:39 on 03 November 2004  Report this post
Heheh, great. Keeps up momentum brilliantly (and all those rhyming words too! Well done, you). It's just great, actually. One of the best things I've read all week, and I've been browsing the sleeve-notes of Roxy Music albums.

Bye!

James

olebut at 17:11 on 03 November 2004  Report this post
Joanie Ha ha you made me laugh which today I needed thank you was your uncle related to The Pobble

take care

david x

The Walrus at 18:05 on 03 November 2004  Report this post
Beautifully crafted as ever Joanie. Very much enjoyed it.

Christina

SamMorris at 22:39 on 03 November 2004  Report this post
Joanie, I thought this worked brilliantly! I liked the way that this had a light and easy surface, but something more underneath (if that makes any sense at all!)

Regards

Sam

joanie at 06:49 on 04 November 2004  Report this post
Ben, James, David, Christina, Sam..... Thank you all for your kind comments.

Sam - that makes perfect sense!

Glad you liked it.
joanie

Fearless at 12:17 on 04 November 2004  Report this post
Cute and clever.

Fearless

joanie at 12:53 on 04 November 2004  Report this post
Thanks, Woz!

joanie


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