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i often do the cleaning

by Souchong 

Posted: 25 October 2004
Word Count: 49


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i often do the cleaning
wearing nothing but a hint of mr sheen
and marigolds, tucked under my armpits.

i love the way my flesh dimples at the dust beside the soap dish
while my belly roars and wobbles, running rings around the bath.

i often do the cleaning.






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The Walrus at 12:44 on 26 October 2004  Report this post
Interesting, amusing snapshot Souchong.

The Walrus

Don Gorgon at 18:02 on 26 October 2004  Report this post
O I do like this Souchong, it made me giggle! I love, 'wearing nothing but a hint of mr sheen', what a beaut of a line! Nice one!

Don

Souchong at 20:51 on 26 October 2004  Report this post
thanks for comments. poem just meant to be a giggle. came out of a light-hearted conversation with a good friend one day.
glad it made u laugh.
souchong

ps - cleaning? what cleaning?

laurafraser at 21:03 on 26 October 2004  Report this post
i love the repetition of "i often do the cleaning"
yummy little piece, which serves to give a very elegant image of the cleaning being done...!
LF

Souchong at 23:25 on 26 October 2004  Report this post
thanks, laura. not sure elegant is the word i'd use, but hey .....
souchong

laurafraser at 09:15 on 27 October 2004  Report this post
think there was a slight irony on the elegance intimated...!
laura x

Souchong at 17:15 on 28 October 2004  Report this post
think there might have been laura! cheers.
souchong


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