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CHAUVINIST
Posted: 23 October 2004 Word Count: 197 Summary: Be brutally constructive.
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In Starbucks I watch men not in the way they watch women but like a callerless maiden wondering what kind of application to create.
That man, suitor one, leers through the steam invading the morning air and over the brim of his coffee cup at each shuffling skirt. He's attractive. I wonder if he looked at me, and what I looked like through his eyes and the steam of his cup.
Suitor two, half-ignoring his wife, looks over her shoulder investigating where the heels of women lead, heels, stockings, legs, edge of skirt. What need of men urges them to search for what they don’t want to find but want to find? The heels move and lead him back to his wife’s face, to his wife’s eyes, still telling a story about mother and her new kitchen.
Suitor three lounges in the back with a book, reading? Eyes waiting for blouses taut over chests to turn from hiding. He ignores eye contact but glances up to put a face with the picture walking the runway in his mind.
I question if I desire callers anymore, if my shape and form will get any to view my resumé.
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roovacrag at 10:33 on 24 October 2004
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Goddy all men are chauvinstic. It's in the genes.
or should I say jeans.
Men ogle women like they are in a meat market,yet very few know how to handle a woman when it comes to love and the making of it.
I think you composed this very well,from a mans point of view.
High heels and he goes into auto.
Stockings..suspenders.even wearing a L'amour bustier just to whet the appetite.
Send his senses soaring.
Great poem.
xxxxx Alice joy
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Brian Aird at 11:36 on 24 October 2004
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I liked the Starbucks setting. My wife says you can look but cannot touch. Makes life seem like the Tate or something doesn't it?
I know for a fact women DO go eyeball us, they're just more discreet than us. One trick used is to watch us reflected in a shop window. Look for it next time.
I'm given to believe it's not our tight jeans, but the way we handle situations and other people that matters. Now, is that right?
Brian
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Chem at 13:47 on 24 October 2004
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Oh yes, I know this feeling! I like to throw men a bit though and point out the stunners before they've clocked them themselves. They aren't too sure what to make of that :-)
I liked this poem; great content and a flowing style.
Emma
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TheGodfather at 16:36 on 24 October 2004
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Alice,
I'm curious. How might the issue be addressed from a woman's point of view? I was trying, honest to God I was.
TheGodfather
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roovacrag at 17:33 on 24 October 2004
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Goddy.. working on this to give men a lesson in love.
Wink in the eye
nudge on the thigh
and you think thats it.
Easy to catch your prey
harder to make them stay.
Many thanks my friend You have given me an idea of a poem.
I did love this poem as well and I love a challenge as all my friends on WW will say,you just lit my fire.
Thats poetry.
xxxx Al
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TheGodfather at 20:36 on 24 October 2004
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Alice,
Nice. I can't wait. Dueling poets, so to speak. Maybe we could be in an anthology side by side or something. This is a glorious thing.
TheGodfather
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Epona Love at 00:09 on 25 October 2004
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Very interesting perspective... a man looking at men from a woman's point of view? Did you picture the woman who was watching the men in your mind? I asume that she wasn't the type that men would be watching because of the last two lines? When you look at men from this perspective you may question whether you want anything to do with them... but I feel that what may be missing from the womans perspective is the way that she feels... exactly what that last statement/question means to her... a lifetime spent alone because she hasn't the confidence in herself or men, the lonliness, frustration? This is the outsiders perspective, the perspective of someone who hasn't seen the inside of a relationship good or bad, hopes for everything, maybe fears everything? But she needs that love and doubts she will ever find it. Love can be a desperate need...
I hope that this might be the sort of feedback your looking for?????
Here's an idea for you, if you want to work from a womans perspective, perhaps you could try writing about how one of the women who are being leered at feel whilst it's happening to them... a waitress in the coffee shop who experiences it day after day maybe?
I enjoyed the poem, it was well thought out... perhaps the suitors could be seperated by a blank line... just to emphasise those wonderful images!
A very interesting observation of men.
Emma x.
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youngskywalker at 16:25 on 31 October 2004
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this is an interesting piece of work,
to me the questions needn't be about men looking, because we all do, the important point is what do we see? perhaps the suitors in the poem could give different accounts of how they view women, are they looking at sex objects? or just attracted by beautiful creatures who brighten up an otherwise dull world.
bryan.
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