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God Sent Me An Angel
Posted: 19 October 2004
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GOD SENT ME AN ANGEL
God sent me an Angel
He knew I could not see
To help me, set me free
God sent me an Angel
He saw I was alone
To help me, guide me home
God sent me an Angel
He saw I was confused
I did not have to choose
God sent me an Angel
A thing I never knew
When God sent me an Angel
That Angel was in you
Carlton Sorrento
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 Fearless at 18:34 on 19 October 2004
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Quite beautiful, reflecting as it does, things that happen to us and others, in the world around us.
Write on, Fearless
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The Walrus at 19:33 on 19 October 2004
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Like it very much, powerful sentiment.
Sould suggest removing the third line in each stanza, for me the repetition simply in the first line would work... just a suggestion.
Look forward to more.
The Walrus
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Sazmac at 21:23 on 19 October 2004
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Carlton,
This is a very strong piece in its simplicity, powerful. Like angels.
I look forward to reading more.
In the second to last stanza, did you mean choose, or chose?
Love and peace,
saz
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roovacrag at 15:51 on 21 October 2004
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Carlton welcome to WW.
a beautiful piece and one I enjoyed reading more than once.
Well done.
xx Alice
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Carlton at 21:41 on 21 October 2004
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Thanks all for the reviews. First time of writing for many years.
Not sure about the third line repetition, Walrus, I think the third stanza would particularly miss it; depends on your inflection at the time I suppose. Yes Saz, I did mean choose; must learn to be less reliant on MS Spell checkers!
Thanks again, more to come
Carlton
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Carlton at 20:53 on 25 October 2004
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O.K Walrus, have tried it out without the repetition, and now agree. First piece written and all that, so thanks for your input.
Carlton.
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Tuppence at 15:12 on 29 October 2004
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that is beautiful
i have bought some little silver angels 2 send 2 friends
they have to name them & keep them close
i am new 2 this
been writing tears & years
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Tuppence at 09:01 on 01 November 2004
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i liked it babe
there is an angel in everyone somewhere
if they look deep enough
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Carlton at 07:39 on 04 November 2004
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Ther's an angel in everyone, but not everybody's an angel!
Carlton
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Tuppence at 20:23 on 11 February 2005
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poppy off here in a mo thank u so much will miss friendship
poppynov11@aol.com
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