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Yoga in Edinburgh
Posted: 19 October 2004 Word Count: 123 Summary: Working in Edninburgh last week - it is a cold cold city!
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Yoga in Edinburgh
You hold your arms out to feed your body. I hold my arms out to feed my soul.
I, within my safe warm blanket. Shiny wood floor. Lovely lycra. The rain on the window, we chant inside.
You, in your cold mould filled rags. The rain inside.
I reach out for my fix in my warm yoga nest. beautiful girls. beautiful bodies. seeking beauty for our minds.
After class. I walk through the wet streets filled with peace and warmth and love.
You shiver, in the wet. filled with emptiness.
You huddled, reach out to me, I ignore you, wrapping my pink coat around.
The rain falls. you reach out for your next fix.
I close my eyes and shiver.
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Fearless at 14:39 on 19 October 2004
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Sassy
Liked the snapshot nature of this, with the twist at the end, as well as the timing. One thing; should it be 'warmth' in the fifth stanza?
Woz
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Sazmac at 15:10 on 19 October 2004
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oops,
thanks Woz,
amended hastily..
Glad you liked it - take care
Saz
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joanie at 22:07 on 19 October 2004
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Saz, I liked this. You painted vivid pictures and feelings, which I could really associate with. I love the contrast, especially
I, within my safe warm blanket.
Shiny wood floor.
Lovely lycra.
The rain on the window,
we chant inside.
You, in your cold mould filled
rags.
The rain inside. |
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Nice one.
joanie
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Sazmac at 08:23 on 20 October 2004
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Hi Joanie
Thanks for reading and commenting. The rain still feels cold now!
Take care
Saz
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Ticonderoga at 16:03 on 20 October 2004
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Very truthful and moving - we all have these moments when we simply can't face too much reality. but, as you're talking about my native city, I have to say that you do it quite a disservice here! Fine poem, though.
Best,
Mike
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Sazmac at 18:12 on 20 October 2004
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Hi Mike
Thanks for taking the time and trouble to read and comment. One of those moments, working away from home, tired, lonely, cold rainy etc.
Edinburgh is of course one of the most beautiful and breathtaking cities we have. Hadnt meant to do it a disservice. Will have to write something else and redress the balance.
Take care
Saz
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Elsie at 18:29 on 20 October 2004
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Beautiful and true. Interesting that even when we try to be more caring - and you clearly are caring - sometimes it's hard to actually accept the situation and do much about it. Lovely irony - the pink coat (seeming to convey luxury, frivolity) was a nice touch.
Elsie
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Sazmac at 22:43 on 20 October 2004
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Hi Elsie, and thank you for your thoughts. The pink coat, sadly exists, and yes it felt sad and and ironic at the time.
Take care
Saz
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laurafraser at 09:45 on 22 October 2004
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i love this poem. yoga is my bliss so in a personal way loved the message of this poem. i love the imagery of the first stanza-salute to the sun or the needle....
gets more powerful when i re-read it
great poem
laura
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Sazmac at 15:01 on 22 October 2004
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Laura,
Thanks for your lovely comment and your perception. We all have our fixes, mine happens to be yoga, like yours too - 'your bliss'. For me it could have so easily have been the other. Yoga keeps me on the path...
Love and peace,
Saz
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Souchong at 09:30 on 23 October 2004
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all of the above, i think! captures an aspect of the dilemma of our time.
like elsie i find the pink coat a strong image.
i love the ambiguity of the last line - 'close my eyes and shiver' - which could be read as a response to the weather or to the situation.
souchong
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