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More Miniwords
Posted: 17 October 2004
Word Count: 39
Summary: Another collection of Miniwords. These are not Haikus, although occasionally one might turn out quite unintentionally, to be a Haiku. The form is nine words in total, three lines of three words each. As there are no titles to these pieces the words must be descriptive enough to tell the reader what the subject matter is. Try it, it's fun.
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Fragile gossamer with
honey dipped tongue
sits upon petal.
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Brightly coloured orb
attached to string
makes children smile.
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Hard and sweet
minty white circle
to freshen breath.
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Soft, cholesterol filled,
golden yellow, thickly
spread upon toast.
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 joanie at 17:10 on 17 October 2004
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Hi Poems, these are great! I love them. I am desperate to try some but I'm busy with another exercise at the moment and I must be focused! I'm going to do some very soon though!
Excellent.
joanie
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 poemsgalore at 17:12 on 17 October 2004
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Thanks Joan for your comments, but do you know what each piece of work represents? (no prizes, sorry).
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By the way, good luck with your own project.
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Chem at 17:14 on 17 October 2004
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These are fab!
Bee, Ballon, polo, butter?
Am I right?
Em
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balloon!
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poemsgalore at 17:16 on 17 October 2004
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Nearly, the first one isn't quite right but you're close.
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The others are spot on. :-)
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My husband says they sound like crossword clues....lol
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Chem at 17:21 on 17 October 2004
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It's such an inspired idea :-)
By the way, I love the word gossamer and used it myself in a haiku experiement recently! It sounds so lovely and so descriptive! Anyway, I will get back to you re. the first one. I want to get this :-)
Em
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I agree with Mr Poemsgalore, these are very much like crossword clues but prettier and much more poetic!
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joanie at 17:24 on 17 October 2004
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Butterfly!
joanie
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Actually I thought the second one was a yoyo.
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Chem at 17:27 on 17 October 2004
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I thought butterfly but the 'honey dripped' made me think of bee and 'gossamer' it's wings....
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poemsgalore at 17:29 on 17 October 2004
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Mr Poemsgalore thought bee too, but it is butterfly. The honey reference is probably wrong as butterflies eat nectar - but that would have made it too easy. Well done, there are more for a later date.
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Joanie, I never thought of a yoyo, but I can see why you did, very clever.
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Chem at 17:32 on 17 October 2004
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Very good! No, honey dipped made perfect sense and sounded good too! More more more, these are fun!
Thank you x
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.JPG) Zettel at 00:50 on 18 October 2004
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Poemsgal
butterfly flutters by
balloon bubbles skywards
polo perfumes breath
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spread on toast
it always falls
this face downwards
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Good game.
Zettel
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poemsgalore at 18:12 on 18 October 2004
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Thanks Zettel and Ticonderoga, brilliant stuff. I'll let you take it from here.
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