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My Heart is a Football
Posted: 11 October 2004
Word Count: 70
Summary: A hasty scribbling.
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My heart is a football,
one minute sailing gaily
upon a goal-bound breeze
the next, plopping pitifully
into an awaiting puddle.
Sometimes it ends up in the net,
other times it glances off the goal post,
but still it continues to skid merrilly
across the muddy pitch.
My heart is a football
and sure, drop-kicking
has scuffed it a bit,
but I don’t know
I’ve got quite attached to it.
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 roovacrag at 17:54 on 11 October 2004
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Red really liked this,was funny to say the least.
The heart is a football,takes more knocks in life that on a football ground.
Well done.
xxxx Red mum.
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Chem at 18:01 on 11 October 2004
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Bob
It's actually quite wonderful that your football heart has been drop-kicked and scuffed, it clearly indicates that you're aren't afraid to use it and that is a beautiful thing.
Fun poem which I enjoyed muchly.
Em
<Added>
Damn! Meant 'you aren't'
Sorry!!
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poemsgalore at 18:25 on 11 October 2004
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Very good, excellent in fact, I'd never thought of the heart like this, but it's absolutely true.
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The Walrus at 18:45 on 11 October 2004
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Thanks guys, it really was quite a random thought - while chomping on a bacon sandwich - always find them inspirational - anyway ummm -the thought that had plenty of space careering wildly round in my head was that it is quite remarkable how people bounce back - hence the football. But you're right RM, people's hearts do take a lot of knocking. And Em, well we all aspire to being lion-hearted;-)
Red Bob
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The Walrus at 18:47 on 11 October 2004
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Thanks Poemsgalore. I know, but of a strange analogy! Glad it worked for you.
The Walrus
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Don Gorgon at 23:29 on 11 October 2004
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Calcio! Fantastico!
I'm a little bit concerned about the 'players' you've been playing with, The Walrus. When I play football, I like to 'caress' the ball, 'stroke' it around the pitch and I have great pride in my first 'touch'! The 'players' you've been playing with obviously knew nothing about becoming as one with the football when they're out there on the pitch! I hope they got relegated! Otherwise, another enjoyable read The Walrus, nice one!
Don
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The Walrus at 09:47 on 12 October 2004
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Calcio si! Perche non?! Well, actually players were not that bad - but at the end of the day, too many red cards, that and consistency/technical skill issues lol. Thanks for your comments Don!
The Walrus
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 joanie at 11:43 on 12 October 2004
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The Walrus, I enjoyed this. Not that I'm 'into' football, but I can see the analogies!
I like how the opening and closing lines make it nicely self-contained. They could almost stand alone!
nice one.
joanie
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The Walrus at 13:44 on 12 October 2004
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Thanks Joanie, am not into footie either!
Thanks for your comment.
Christina
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literati at 07:53 on 15 October 2004
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Hi there! A "hasty scribbling," indeed! Probably a lot of subconscious thinking beforehand Walrus. You do have a lovely way with words and concepts! Thoroughly enjoyed your poem, and loved the use of metaphor. Still having a dalliance with heels clicking on flagstones though! Superb! Literati
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Lawrenco at 21:56 on 15 October 2004
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What a cherrie little number loved the imagery,the freedom of the ball,and the analogy of your free spirit,understanding the pitfulls that can bring,and tackle them head on,as it were.
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The Walrus at 19:45 on 16 October 2004
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Hi Literati - errr, yes, you're probably right on the subconscious thinking thing! Thanks for your kind comments.
Thanks Patrick - glad the analogy worked for you.
The Walrus
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