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Ode to Wine (Confessions of an Alcoholic in Denial)
Posted: 07 October 2004 Word Count: 121
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Ruby red is the colour of my love darker than blood it blends sublime unravelling welcomley the furious workings of my mind.
Full bodied is the shape of my muse free from the constricting bodice of sobriety breasts swaying gaily gently mesmorising the blues.
Elemental is the nature of my desire indisputable, its enchanting effect a blissful remedy to fracious enemies, the hypocrites, leaving a soul unrestrained - free to breathe.
Just enough, not too much to unshroud the hidden stairway to the candle-lit den of nightime insanity free from daytime chains of moral probity.
Just enough, not too much to transport upon a halcyon breeze to land bemused in time-warped twilight refuge.
Ruby red is the colour of my love.
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Chem at 20:07 on 07 October 2004
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Bob
This is a fantastic poem, full of sumptuous imagery, richness, texture and some amazing ideas. I like the poem so very much and every line, every stanza worked so very well. In particular I thought these were brilliant:
"it blends sublime"
"bodice of sobriety"
"unshroud the hidden stairway"
"transport upon a halcyon breeze"
But really I could list your whole poem! I don't mind to sound so damn creepy, I just really like the way you write!
Em
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want* not mind!
I must use the preview facility!
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The Walrus at 20:17 on 07 October 2004
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Wow, gulp, what can I say, but thank you.
Bob
Ps My previous offer of marriage still stands ;-)
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Chem at 20:21 on 07 October 2004
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Am now laughing very loudly and promising that I'm not stalker material :-)
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roovacrag at 20:38 on 07 October 2004
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Red
, Nothing like a glass of vino.
Nice and soft and not as strong as tennants as you know.
Full bodied and true to form.
Better to stick to a glass or2.no more than 5.
Otherwise you will be alone and lonely.
Drink is a comfort but not a substitute for love.
Cheers love as I pour a glass of wine.
I want you to find love ,not be old with a glass of wine.
xxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxx Red mum.
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Mooncat at 20:52 on 07 October 2004
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This is fantastic - delicious imagery that makes me want to have a glass or two right now.
Mooncat
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The Walrus at 10:39 on 08 October 2004
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RM, Mooncat, thanks very much - glad you enjoyed it. Surprising how writing flows better with a glass of wine next to your laptop!
Cheers
The Walrus
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joanie at 16:06 on 08 October 2004
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The Walrus,
This is a wonderful tribute to wine, but at the moment I'm not drinking it because I discovered that it might not be good for me! .......and it's Friday night, and I WANT A GLASS OF WINE!!
Maybe I'll read your poem again and it might have the desired effect.
joanie
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oh dear, my recent postings give the impression that I've had too much! It's this stupid over-sensitive touch pad - it has a mind of its own.
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The Walrus at 20:22 on 08 October 2004
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Hi Joanie, thank you for your comment. Hope your abstinence is temporary. I share touch pad problems.
Thanks again
The Walrus
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Don Gorgon at 15:19 on 10 October 2004
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I can fully appreciate this poem (substituting the wine for Guinness and dark rum), having just returned from a two day 'bender'. I particularly liked the word 'welcomley', what a lovely word, it is intoxicating work Walrus!
Thanks
Don
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Lawrenco at 20:07 on 10 October 2004
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Nothing like letting your hair down .I agree with chem so many good descriptions so witty it really puts a picture in your mind about it.
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The Walrus at 21:59 on 10 October 2004
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Thanks Patrick, yes letting hair down would be a pretty fair description of the inspiration behind this piece.
The Walrus
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The Walrus at 07:39 on 11 October 2004
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Thanks Don, ummm, is that Guiness and dark rum as in together in one glass???
Hope you're fully recovered and thanks for the comment.
The Walrus
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