 Nell at 08:15 on 29 September 2004
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Hi joanie. A tease of a poem - a feather-touch which left me wanting more. A sense too that you've maybe flirted with the idea of a subtle tattoo, yet can't quite bring yourself to do it. I once saw a woman - in her sixties at least - with tattoos and piercings over ever visible part of her body - it made me shudder. But surely a little one... You'd have to trust the artist though.
Nell.
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 joanie at 08:28 on 29 September 2004
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Nell, it took me until the age of 40 to have my ears pierced!
Hope you had a nice break.
Thanks for responding.
joanie
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Nell at 08:35 on 29 September 2004
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Joanie, I switched off completely, in spite of taking work with me, and found myself in a beautiful place unable to write a single word. I think it did me good though - perhaps some poetry will come from that time later.
Nell.
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 laurafraser at 09:23 on 29 September 2004
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subtle-
i like the idea of the tatoo waiting to see who is going to come over the thong-gives the image of a tatoo an innocence that "perhaps" most don't have-especially when placed on hip...
on a personal level-if you want the tatoo-why not? it's a hip after all and if small, it doesn't make a difference-yes you may hate it after a while but then amusement is derived from the impetuousness of the mood that drove you to get it-i had one when i was 14 there, (&though highly highly tacky)- i think one grows fond of them the way one does a tattered moth eaten jumper...
:and surely the only way "to fan the burgeoning fire within" is to just to do it!
Laura
(hurts though!)
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Chem at 14:55 on 29 September 2004
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I'm 26 and haven't even had my ears pierced yet :-)
A great poem Joanie, I especially like the 'coyly peeping' stanza; it personified the tattoo in my mind. I felt the last stanza to be incredibly passionate! Very good.
Em
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joanie at 17:11 on 29 September 2004
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Elspeth, Laura, Em, Mike. Really glad you liked it - thanks very much!
Laura - that's it then - if it hurts I'm definitely not doing it.
joanie
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Don Gorgon at 19:11 on 30 September 2004
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joanie, what cried out to me about this poem was 'femininity'! I could never imagine a tattoo on a bloke saying the same tings to me, if you know what I mean? And the teasing nature of the poem, smacks of femininity to me!! Foxy! Haha!
This was a pleasure to read and I have read it a good few times now and keep going back!
Thanks!
Don
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miffle at 14:24 on 01 October 2004
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I do like the quirky idea of a 'two point five centimetre dolphin'!
Also, like all the tentative 't' sounds threading through the poem and for this reason 'burgeoning' struck me as different, a word in contrast, not necessarily out of place.
Like too the way that you have framed the poem with 'Perhaps': wondered how the poem might work with the first 'perhaps' on its own line / stanza too (?)
'Perhaps' (and of course the unforgettable thong cameo ) gives the poem a flirtatiousness which I enjoyed.
Write on, Nikki
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NB Not to tatoo: think about how the moles will feel :-)
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TheGodfather at 20:29 on 01 October 2004
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I love the theme, the topic, you address here. I loved the word 'perhaps.' Perhaps what? Great ending. Perhaps sex. Perhaps ugliness. Perhaps. I almost wish there were some of the perhapses detailed. But that's me as a reader, lazy, perhaps.
TheGodfather
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The Walrus at 15:19 on 02 October 2004
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Can't really add much to the comments above apart from I loved it too! A sensual, tantalising piece, simple but very effective.
The Walrus
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joanie at 17:06 on 02 October 2004
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Nikki, Godfather, Walrus - thank you very much, all of you!
Nikki, I really wasnted to keep the pattern of the stanzas, but I could try another 'perhaps' at the beginning, on its own, perhaps!
joanie
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Tuppence at 16:16 on 28 October 2004
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a small scorpio
a small chinese symbol
tattoos showing my existance
this is who i am
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