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The Con Game

by The Walrus 

Posted: 21 September 2004
Word Count: 154
Summary: WIP


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What a woman!
Beauty, balls and brains!
Talented, gifted even.
But they don’t know
what it takes.
They don’t know
the price she pays
and how so very high
she raised the stakes.
They don’t realise
she’s forgotten how to be vulnerable.

Sassy, stylish and sexy
that’s what they say,
brave and go-getting,
turning heads…. go girl go!
But they can’t remember
what it’s like to sleep alone,
they don’t know
she’s forgotten how to share.

And yes, oh so cool intellect,
incisive diamond-scoring wit -
all that and a passion simmering beneath.
But they don’t have to say
hello and goodbye
they don’t know
she‘s forgotten how to cry.

They don’t know
that beneath the veneer -
that impenetrable smiling mask -
she’s scared,
that while they share,
she’s tired of being brave,
of making her own way.
They don’t know
she’s forgotten how to love.

They have forgotten,
she’s just a girl.






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roovacrag at 21:47 on 21 September 2004  Report this post
Red an excellent piece and so different from your previous work.
A refreshing change and one you should be proud of.
I think we can all see a bit of ourselves in there.

Well done.

xx Red mum

The Walrus at 21:49 on 21 September 2004  Report this post
Hey Red Mum, your approval is always deeply appreciated. I thank you.

RD
xx

Chem at 22:04 on 21 September 2004  Report this post
Hi Bob

I like this very much. Hard-hitting and powerful.
I've been there and I am sure many women will relate!

Great poem
Em

The Walrus at 22:28 on 21 September 2004  Report this post
Em, I am pleased you like this. It's a bit of a departure for me, in terms of style and conspicuously lacking in imagery - which I always like to hide behind.

Thanks for commenting!

Bob



Chem at 00:55 on 22 September 2004  Report this post
You don't need to hide behind anything young lady :-)

The Walrus at 06:52 on 22 September 2004  Report this post
Lol, thanks Em :-)

joanie at 08:39 on 22 September 2004  Report this post
The Walrus, I really like this; it's full of insight. Thought-provoking too.
joanie

The Walrus at 11:49 on 22 September 2004  Report this post
Thanks Joanie - it's not terribly elegant piece, still needs alot of reworking, but glad you enjoyed it.

The Walrus

miffle at 12:51 on 22 September 2004  Report this post
I enjoyed this Walrus and think it very much a poem for the times in terms of women and the world of work / the domestic world.

The last line reminded me of the scene in Hugh Grant's (well, I can't remember his film character's name!) bookshop in Notting Hill when Julia Roberts (Anna?) pays him a surprise visit, drops off a Chagall original as a gift, and reminds him that she too is 'just a girl'...

Interesting how the poem moves from the idea of 'What a woman ' to 'just a girl ': I like that framing.

All the best, miffle



<Added>

NB Wild Women Press / competition: have you checked it out?

The Walrus at 13:45 on 22 September 2004  Report this post
You're right Miffle about the last line: remember that scene very vividly.

Thanks for your comment, appreciated.

The Walrus

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Well check out competition. Thanks.

tinyclanger at 13:53 on 22 September 2004  Report this post
I'd echo the apt comments already made, Walrus. Great piece about 'seeing and being' - what we appear against what we really are, or at least believe ourselves to be.
I like the title - who's she 'conning', herself or the world?!
x
tc

The Walrus at 18:36 on 22 September 2004  Report this post
Thanks tc, accurate take. You're right about the title too.

Thanks

The Walrus
x

Ticonderoga at 13:11 on 24 September 2004  Report this post
Very perceptive, and very true, for all of us; we often forget to remember that underneath the facade most of us remain vulnerable children. A very human and humane piece. Keep scribbling!

Love & Mercy,

Mike

The Walrus at 19:54 on 26 September 2004  Report this post
Thanks Mike, it's good to hear that this works from the male perspective.

Comment appreciated.

Christina


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