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The Con Game
Posted: 21 September 2004 Word Count: 154 Summary: WIP
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What a woman! Beauty, balls and brains! Talented, gifted even. But they don’t know what it takes. They don’t know the price she pays and how so very high she raised the stakes. They don’t realise she’s forgotten how to be vulnerable.
Sassy, stylish and sexy that’s what they say, brave and go-getting, turning heads…. go girl go! But they can’t remember what it’s like to sleep alone, they don’t know she’s forgotten how to share.
And yes, oh so cool intellect, incisive diamond-scoring wit - all that and a passion simmering beneath. But they don’t have to say hello and goodbye they don’t know she‘s forgotten how to cry.
They don’t know that beneath the veneer - that impenetrable smiling mask - she’s scared, that while they share, she’s tired of being brave, of making her own way. They don’t know she’s forgotten how to love.
They have forgotten, she’s just a girl.
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roovacrag at 21:47 on 21 September 2004
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Red an excellent piece and so different from your previous work.
A refreshing change and one you should be proud of.
I think we can all see a bit of ourselves in there.
Well done.
xx Red mum
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The Walrus at 21:49 on 21 September 2004
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Hey Red Mum, your approval is always deeply appreciated. I thank you.
RD
xx
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Chem at 22:04 on 21 September 2004
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Hi Bob
I like this very much. Hard-hitting and powerful.
I've been there and I am sure many women will relate!
Great poem
Em
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The Walrus at 22:28 on 21 September 2004
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Em, I am pleased you like this. It's a bit of a departure for me, in terms of style and conspicuously lacking in imagery - which I always like to hide behind.
Thanks for commenting!
Bob
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Chem at 00:55 on 22 September 2004
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You don't need to hide behind anything young lady :-)
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joanie at 08:39 on 22 September 2004
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The Walrus, I really like this; it's full of insight. Thought-provoking too.
joanie
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The Walrus at 11:49 on 22 September 2004
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Thanks Joanie - it's not terribly elegant piece, still needs alot of reworking, but glad you enjoyed it.
The Walrus
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miffle at 12:51 on 22 September 2004
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I enjoyed this Walrus and think it very much a poem for the times in terms of women and the world of work / the domestic world.
The last line reminded me of the scene in Hugh Grant's (well, I can't remember his film character's name!) bookshop in Notting Hill when Julia Roberts (Anna?) pays him a surprise visit, drops off a Chagall original as a gift, and reminds him that she too is 'just a girl'...
Interesting how the poem moves from the idea of 'What a woman ' to 'just a girl ': I like that framing.
All the best, miffle
<Added>
NB Wild Women Press / competition: have you checked it out?
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The Walrus at 13:45 on 22 September 2004
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You're right Miffle about the last line: remember that scene very vividly.
Thanks for your comment, appreciated.
The Walrus
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Well check out competition. Thanks.
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tinyclanger at 13:53 on 22 September 2004
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I'd echo the apt comments already made, Walrus. Great piece about 'seeing and being' - what we appear against what we really are, or at least believe ourselves to be.
I like the title - who's she 'conning', herself or the world?!
x
tc
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The Walrus at 18:36 on 22 September 2004
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Thanks tc, accurate take. You're right about the title too.
Thanks
The Walrus
x
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Ticonderoga at 13:11 on 24 September 2004
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Very perceptive, and very true, for all of us; we often forget to remember that underneath the facade most of us remain vulnerable children. A very human and humane piece. Keep scribbling!
Love & Mercy,
Mike
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The Walrus at 19:54 on 26 September 2004
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Thanks Mike, it's good to hear that this works from the male perspective.
Comment appreciated.
Christina
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