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I Think Of Your Smile
Posted: 20 September 2004
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I think of your smile
and stop awhile.
Years fly
and I cry
for what I never had -
so sad.
Where is your face?
Time has erased
your eyes,
your nose,
your chin.
So I begin
to think of your smile
and stop awhile.
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 joanie at 19:03 on 20 September 2004
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poems, I am reminded of the song, 'The shadow of your smile'. I love this - very poignant.
I like the (almost!) repetition of the opening and closing lines.
joanie
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 Jumbo at 22:53 on 20 September 2004
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Kathleen
Nice words.
I'm interested to know why you chose to place this in the Songs & Lyrics group. And I wonder what it is that makes us feel that one set of words is a poem, whilst another is a lyric, potentially capable of being set to music.
Nevertheless, your words have a lovely, soft feel to them. The touch of a lost love.
Thanks for sharing them.
All the best
jumbo
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joanie at 08:29 on 21 September 2004
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Jumbo, that's interesting. I didn't realise that this was in the Songs & Lyrics group, so I read it as a poem, but it reminded me of a song instantly, as I said.
joanie
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The Walrus at 22:00 on 21 September 2004
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Mmmmm, beautiful reminisence(sp) - lost loves - forgotten - but something always remains.
The Walrus
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poemsgalore at 18:07 on 22 September 2004
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Wasn't actually written as a song, but as it sounded quite lyrical, I thought it might give someone the idea for a song. Or maybe it could be altered to become a song.
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Okkervil at 20:23 on 27 September 2004
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What a lovely poem! Can't think of anything truly constructive to say except that I liked it immensely. When you read it again, y'can tell it's a song (I too didn't notice straight away) but it still reads excellently, tumbling off the tongue. Thanks for niceness!
Bye!
James
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