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BEDTIME

by TheGodfather 

Posted: 04 September 2004
Word Count: 222
Summary: A Dr. Seussish Tale


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The mom said “Good night.”
The kids said “Good riddance.”
What now…oh yeah…
Watch the sheep and the fence.
“Not!” said the kids
as they jumped out of bed
Off went the sheets
Up came the pillows
And out came the feathers
in billows and billows.
“Knock it off!” said the mom
slamming open the door.
“Not one little peep,
or you’ll sleep on the floor.”
It hurt them a lot.
You could tell by each face,
for they fought and they fought.
They didn’t care
if they slept on the floor.
“Big deal” Marty said
throwing pillows some more.
The mom hit the door
in a thunderous rage.
“Now don’t you wish that
you would’ve obeyed.”
“Smack,” went the sheets.
“Whack,” went the pillows.
The mom was part now;
she was right in the middle.
Then in a flash
Marty jumped on her back
Then Tommy hopped on
and picked up the slack.
“We’ve got her now,”
they thought in their heads.
The next thing they knew
they were back in their bed,
could they move, not a bit.
The mom left the room
with a grin on her face.
But still both the kids
just lay there amazed.
They both tried to think
about how this could be.
But they now had no choice
so they both went to sleep.






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roovacrag at 15:54 on 04 September 2004  Report this post
Goddy one fantastic poem. Well written and very amusing.
Printed it off to read to the kids.

Not once did the flow stop,nor did I have to go back and re-read in case I missed something.

Well done.

xx Alice

roger at 16:06 on 04 September 2004  Report this post
My God, God, this rips along at a hell of a pace and, as Alice says, it's funny and really well written. At the end, I could just see the 'Oh, sod it, might as well settle down then' expressions on the kid's faces. Lovely...not sure mum would get away with that under our current government though!

A tiny thing...should the second 'now' in the penultimate line be a 'no'?

TheGodfather at 17:35 on 04 September 2004  Report this post
Thanks Alice and Roger,

I'm glad you both enjoyed it. I changed the 'now' to 'no.' Thanks for catching it. Amazing what gets by you when you proofread.

TheGodfather

crowspark at 20:04 on 04 September 2004  Report this post
Hi Goddy, great poem. This took me back to bedtimes with my sons, reading them Dr Seuss.

Enjoyed it.
Bill


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