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Defying Newton

by llydstp 

Posted: 03 September 2004
Word Count: 69


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Gravity
Iím not ready for you yet
I wonít be falling down
for quite some time
you can have my feet
and pin them to the ground
but youíre going to have to wait
for the rest of me
itís not that Iím ungrateful
I thank you for stopping me
from flying off into space
but this doesnít mean
I will reward you
by falling flat on my face






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roger at 21:15 on 03 September 2004  Report this post
Hi, Steve. As always with your writing, it's beautifully done, but, me not being overly bright and needing things spelling out, I'm not sure if this is a straightforward go at Newton and his law, or if it's much deeper than that. I suspect the latter, but can't figure it out...maybe death, that final trip to the ground from which there's no return? I don't know, but I'd like to. Either way, it's a lovely piece of writing.

Oh, and it's great to see you back after such a long time. How's the novel going? Finished?

Fearless at 00:34 on 04 September 2004  Report this post
Welcome back Steve. This strikes me as something of a double-edged lyric. Slightly deadpan, detached, with an as-a-matter-of-fact tinge. I liked it.

Write on, Woz

llydstp at 11:47 on 04 September 2004  Report this post
Thank you both for your kind comments. I'm not too sure what it's about myself - it just popped into my head one evening as I was walking down a street in Chester. (Maybe I'd just tripped over a broken flagstone?)
There's a strong possibility that gravity is being used as a metaphor for life, which (in my case at least), seems always to be ready to trip you up. It could also be a metaphor for death (well spotted Roger).
Whatever it means, I intended it to be mildly amusing. (At least I think I did, because I've no idea how it got into my head in the first place!)
Roger, I will e-mail you with regards to the novel and recent developments.
Steve


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