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Sticky night (haiku)

by Seahorse 

Posted: 30 August 2004
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Sticky night -
net curtains twitch
in travelodge






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tinyclanger at 11:56 on 31 August 2004  Report this post
I like this, Seahorse!
Wonder if its the first haiku to include a travelodge!

Enigmatic and sultry. Hints of something improper...teases.

Very clever.
Glad I found and read it.
x
tc
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miffle at 23:02 on 31 August 2004  Report this post
Seahorse, a seedy haiku this for me ;-) All the best, Nikki

NB in answer to your question i suspect YES and never mind haiku perhaps even poem ?
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roovacrag at 03:53 on 01 September 2004  Report this post
Seahorse a good piece of Haiku. Would like to see this as a poem as well.
xx Alice
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joanie at 14:03 on 01 September 2004  Report this post
Seahorse, I like the scene this conveys. It set my mind thinking; reference to twitching curtains and stickiness - I agree with tc, it's teasing.
joanie
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Account Closed at 14:26 on 04 September 2004  Report this post
At last!! A hot travellers' poem - wonderful! Hope it's the first in a long haiku line of travel poems - next stop, Holiday Inn???

:))

LoL

A
xxx
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peterxbrown at 01:22 on 11 September 2004  Report this post
Love it!
Very mysterious but also easy to relate to .peterb
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jewelsx at 01:44 on 19 January 2005  Report this post

Travelodge, i don't think i have ever read something quite as interesting about the place before.
I agree with the majority of people you have left it quite mysterious with just enough input to form a strong visual image.

haiku's are still relatively new to me, some read alot eassier than others i am just learning what makes them good and what makes them not so good, as opposed to going on instinct. I will probably be back to this one.

julie
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