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Whale Rider.

by Lawrenco 

Posted: 24 August 2004
Word Count: 256
Summary: From a film of the same name.About the Wangara Tribe,Mauris living in New Zealand. legend would have it a Mauri warrior rode on a back of a whale to bring his people to the shaws of New Zealand. A brilliant natural film with a awesome performance never acted before,only 12 years old. Keisha Castle-Hughes. The film translates like a poem for me ,so I decided to give you a trailer as it were (unofficial).


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I stand amongst the material age.
Fight head on with my shield of ancestry
As strong as thick rope entwined wrights!

Elder spirits,leave for whales,entering their divulgence.
They are large enough to kill the beast called isolation.
We are left to struggle and put to our daily test.

Strong enough to be natures torpedo;causing havoc!
Though like an ancient meditation.They glide endlessly
through the sea peacefully.

Wise enough though to stay formidable;
like a moving island.
surprisingly only the plancton are frightened.

We are aghast with wonder.These sea creatures bask,
in our soul anchor,we feel their presence.
Though we grapple against the arrogance of our age.

We turn over a new page.

The existing chief,throws the giant whale tooth
To the bed of the ocean.A boat full of reluctant recruits.
such is the nurturing of the new fruits.

Which Maori boy,will be a man?Dive for honour,glory,pride.
Who is favoured by natures,strength,to steer his tribe clear,a future with security not vulnerability and fear.

Prize too much?To be Chief ,who will pick out the tooth,
from the ocean bed?A fight breaks out instead .
ivory offering remains the seas claim.

We here the raw of the sea,
will the whales listen to me?
As I speak the ancient talk to be.

Who will be the Whale rider?Who bought us to these shaws?
The inner voice rises again you see ,they say it`s for me.
The crown ,and place my tribe to good society.

Do I truly have that inner wealth?
After all i`m only a girl of Twelve.











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roovacrag at 07:25 on 25 August 2004  Report this post
Patrick,excellent poem. So different that it makes you want to read it over and over.

Well done.

xx Alice

Fearless at 09:11 on 25 August 2004  Report this post
Patrick

Took me back to when I watched the film. Great film, great poem.

Write on, Fearless

miffle at 11:54 on 25 August 2004  Report this post
Great subject to pick, enjoyed this Patrick! A dignified poem: links to the mood of the film... Full of grace and a sense of the mystic: which I thought came across beautifully, poetically in the film.

Loved 'Though like an ancient meditation. They glide endlessly'. Does the next line add anything to this already, peaceful image (?). Perhaps end the stanza on 'endlessly'... to me the word, with its 's's' kind of drifts off like a whale into the infinite (?)... And the rhythm and sound of the poem carry an innate sense of peace

Loved also 'in our soul anchor we feel their presence'... A real sense of the 'ancients'.

A thought re. the girl: I interpreted her as more sure about her destiny than you do here in the questioning lines... (?) A mystic and a visionary. But this of course is subjective and also not necessarily important re. your poem i.e. it exists on its own merits beyond the film!

I think if I were you I would polish this one up and get it published! Write on, Nikki

NB I know you're not really into 'typos' but 'wrights' meaning 'rites' or 'rights' ? And do you mean 'roar' or 'raw'?

Lawrenco at 18:03 on 25 August 2004  Report this post
Al,Woz,Nicki, Thanks for your comments ;yes miffle,typos,raw was a silly spelling mistake,although wrights is an old word for craftman ,a bit like smith ,Wheelwright,Shipwright,etc.
I tried to give the word a double meaning .they have there rights,because of ancestaral labour their inheritance.
Possibly trying to be too clever.
Wasn`t it a great film.

yes your right it does need tidying up(no pun intended).

olebut at 07:35 on 26 August 2004  Report this post
Lawrenco I think your poem does justice to a proud people it is sensitive and yet projects their majesty.

Normally I think Maori is spelt with an 'o' not a 'u' is that an ethnic spelling ?

ref raw oddly enough I interpreted this as raw menaing rough and powerful and did not think it was an error had no problem with wright

good piece

take care

david



Lawrenco at 17:05 on 26 August 2004  Report this post
Thanks david for your kind comment. Oops caught me out on the spelling again will edit .Happy that you enjoyed it.
The films realy moving.

LONGJON at 03:00 on 27 August 2004  Report this post
Hi Lawrenco,

Don't worry too much about the spelling -although 'Maori' is the spelling for the name of the people, 'Mauri' is a word very close to it and means "life force", very much "the essence of us" as Maori.

John P.

Lawrenco at 08:48 on 31 August 2004  Report this post
Thanks John ,For you enlightening comment,so mauri is like ki the energy force that represents ones existence -interesting.


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