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tantalising tongue

by Sam Rix 

Posted: 19 August 2004
Word Count: 294
Summary: My first piece for the beginners board, I hope it isn't too off the wall?


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‘Pleasure me’ I appealed, promising exquisite delight and wave upon wave of sensual satisfaction.
‘Give me that wet rapture, borne of heat, friction and need’.
Resolve was weakening, I could tell, daylight was being compressed from view by delicate membranes, as saliva began to toy with delicious prophecy.

‘Ah.…, a piece of apple, crisp and sweet, light and clean, the juices cooling lips hot from need, you heard the call from within my being.
I can give you more, so much more…’

‘I know the dark needs and the want’s, I could give them all to you. I can satisfy the craving, the yearning for release, I can end the sweaty palms, the curling toes and the spasming thighs.’

You gasp, because you know its true, fresh air rushing in to quell the embers growing within…
Ice, played over your face, run to your mouth, the tantalising trickle of cool tears coursing down neck and teasingly between breasts…

‘Come, we have been here before, we are no strangers you and I, we are beyond guilt for our sensual sins. We share a knowledge of how to please, you offer me the sustenance of erotic life, I play your emotional desires and your physical needs to make you groan.’

I can hear your heart beat rising, I can feel your skin warming in anticipation, the wholesome crisp bread you bite, the coarseness of it’s texture, the oatmeal heaviness, you savour the nutty tang. They are but an appetiser for things to come…

‘I will liberate euphoria to course through your very being’, I can make your mind sing with bliss, your body tingle with contentment, I implore.

“Sod it!” Janice cursed standing at her fridge, tasting the chocolate, and blowing her diet for another day…






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baroque at 12:25 on 19 August 2004  Report this post
Sam
I love it whether you planned it or not you had my perverse brain off somewhere else.

Claire

Bianca at 15:52 on 19 August 2004  Report this post
Sam

Superb. I too was off elsewhere with this.

As a chocolate lover - and one who has been on many diets in her life - I can definately confirm that a slice of apple is NO competition against a square of chocolate

Shirley


Sam Rix at 22:52 on 19 August 2004  Report this post
Hi Shirley, Claire,

Yeap, I was definitely at play with the two themes interwoven here.
I got into one of those teasing moods and thought-
Why not play the scene like an enticing lover, draw the reader one way, but leave an under current to hint at the true theme.

I'm glad you were drawn with my dastardly mucky lure, or maybe the tongue is the lover we all ignore? he he he...

Thank you both for your input and support, glad I could brighten the day, the piece made me grin and squirm as I wrote it.

Love and luck
Sam


Anna Reynolds at 18:34 on 21 August 2004  Report this post
Sam, this is quite outrageous, and fittingly so, you've really used just about all the sensory descriptions a tongue could possibly ask for from a writer. The last line is great- you really convey a sense of the tongue teasing its owner- apple, yeh, wholemeal bread, yeh, but what we're really building up to is the choc. I wanted the tongue to tease her more, actually, a whole list of foods and textures, maybe building up through a range of things? Lovely stuff.

Sam Rix at 22:17 on 22 August 2004  Report this post
Oh bugger,
as all ways not enough foreplay! :-)

Seriously though;
Thanks for the input here Anna, I was not sure how this would be received, I'm glad you liked it.
The lack of teasing was all your fault though, you limited me to around 250 words!!!
I was gagging to draw it out more, but tried to remain close to your limit.

I’ll try to be more relaxed with my flow in future.

Cheers for the positive and looking forward to the next assignment.

Love and luck
Sam



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