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by JDM 

Posted: 17 August 2004
Word Count: 58
Summary: bit of a knee trembler, to get out of my system...

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Each breathe the tenacity of purpose
Zealot of hesitancy relinquishing fate
I stroke the moments
Behind your closed eyes of passion
That looked within my heart
Filled me with all the perfumes of Arabia
Discovering the heresy of love
Irrigating the bear ground
Sweet rivulets of naked sweat
I close my eyes
Exhale before jasmine
Pervades me again

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roovacrag at 20:06 on 17 August 2004  Report this post
JDM, Very exotic poem,one I like.

Perfumes of Arabia..Jasmine my favourite smell.

Well done.


The Walrus at 07:28 on 21 August 2004  Report this post
Powerful and passionate. Like it.

The Walrus

miffle at 08:51 on 21 August 2004  Report this post
A breathy piece with an Eastern feel. Like the placing of religious words here alongside words referring to the body. Look forward to more. Miffle NB 'bare' ? Can 'sweat' be 'naked' ?

JDM at 11:36 on 21 August 2004  Report this post
Thank you...

Sorry for typo, and indeed sweat can be most def naked.

paul53 [for I am he] at 17:31 on 02 March 2005  Report this post
Found this is the Random Read. General agreement with all the above. Well done.

Beanie Baby at 14:53 on 12 July 2005  Report this post
I too found this as a random read. Very exotic and beautifully written, full of colours and perfume. Like it.

didau at 20:54 on 24 May 2010  Report this post
Should it be breath rather than breathe in the first line?

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