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The Altruistic Elephant

by Jibunnessa 

Posted: 16 February 2003
Word Count: 159


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Would the altruistic elephant
that pulled the suicidal man
from the edge
of a rocky outcrop
with the curl of its trunk,
be nominated
for the peace prize?

Would the man agree?

As he sits in pain
his face bleeding
shattered nose
and a few lost teeth
pulled along
the sharp, eclectic surface
at the edge
of his
planned descent.

Would the orchids thank him?

Deprived of the blood
that would cascade
down the hillside below
to nourish the soil
that nourished the plants.

And what about all the women that never noticed him?

Would the invisible skin
around his footsteps
lift
with the excruciating pain
of his
swollen lips?

Would anything change?

Would his life begin again?

His fate sealed
in a fit of giggles,
overwhelmed
by the improbability
of an altruistic curl
from an altruistic elephant.

Would this be a sign?

A calling?

Or just a message?

Never jump
where there are elephants about,
especially not
the altruistic kind.



---Jib, 5.17pm, 16 Feb 03, at home in the light, while the world outside looks cold and miserable.






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Jibunnessa at 13:53 on 06 April 2003  Report this post
James, you wrote the following (at the bottom of the poem 'Silence'):

"'The Altruistic Elephant' doesn't need comment, it speaks for itself - which is not to say it's simple or obvious, there's a lot of directions the reader's thoughts can go."

Not entirely sure what you mean. Perhaps you could elaborate?

Look forward to further comments.


James Graham at 21:42 on 16 April 2003  Report this post
I still warm to this poem, and I've tried doing some sort of critical commentary but find for some reason I don't particularly want to interpret it. It centres around what seems a rather (delightfully) surreal incident. (Is it based on something that really happened? Even if it is, it still seems surreal - as reality often does.) The questions the poem asks about it are very thought-provoking. I began by treating them as rhetorical, some of them suggesting the answer 'no', but then there was always a qualification - no,but... What follows 'but' is quite complex and still working itself out. All the questions are surprising, especially, I think, 'Would the orchids thank him?' Being non-sentient perhaps they wouldn't care one way or the other, but in your scenario perhaps they wouldn't thank him. Orchids have interests very different from ours. I like the way the poem's perspective jumps with each new question. Some questions are more open than others - 'Would anything change?' is maybe the most open, with the possibility of many shades of answer. I like your ending too, which has a throwaway air about it - but as we read it we know there's more to it than the last lines seem to suggest. There - I've done some interpretation after all. I find this poem interesting, which is usually a term of faint praise, but not in this case. The questions it puts are intriguing.

James.

Jibunnessa at 23:37 on 16 April 2003  Report this post
Is altruism a good thing? Or does it just make the altruistic feel better about themselves? Or indeed even damage the one being 'helped'?

But, as with a lot of my poems, there are multi layers of meaning. I think though it would be better to leave it for readers to get their own meaning from it rather than explain everything away.

As for a real incident... not exactly. However, I did once upon a time have a near death experience slipping off the side of a hillside in Turkey. But, the left leg of my jeans rolled up and the friction of the roll against the soft rock held me up there for long enough to be helped down. So I didn't die. But spent the rest of the day in a fit of giggles... unable to believe I wasn't dead. But there were no orchids or elephants involved.

roger at 07:52 on 17 April 2003  Report this post
Hi Jibunnessa,

Well you've killed my 'elephant' poem haven't you? Stone dead. There was me thinking elephants were a complete waste of space, completely pointless, just roaming around making the occasional strange noise.But, now, not only do I discover that that's not the case, that they may (or may not, depending on the conclusions drawn from your lovely poem) affect the future of our planet, but that they have qualities, actual humanoid type qualities! Now who'd have thought that an Elephant could be altruistic? - You've changed my whole view of life, I'm now ashamed of my poem, totally ashamed. May I take this opportunity to publicly apologise to elephants, whether African or Indian, unconditionally. Many thanks for putting my right on this...much appreciated.

More seriously, I really did like your poem. I'm pretty useless at thinking, so something that forces the issue a bit is worthwhile.

Jibunnessa at 09:00 on 17 April 2003  Report this post
I haven't killed your poem. I think I might have written mine first (see bottom of poem). In any case, yours is funny. So that's good.

But, on behalf of elephants everywhere (as they haven't really learnt to use the internet yet), I accept your apology.

Oh by the way, you might be interested in this elephant info. In certain Indian historical texts there's mention of assassination attempts involving elephants (it's a variation on the venomous virgin idea). The idea was to bring up an elephant, feeding it with greater and greater amounts of poison so that it's body became conditioned to it and therefore unharmed. But, when the person who's life is being attempted upon sits on this poison creature, he gets nasty sores on his bum and eventually dies a painful death.

What cunning plan, ey!

roger at 09:59 on 17 April 2003  Report this post
I don't believe a word of it!

Jibunnessa at 10:14 on 17 April 2003  Report this post
Have you never heard of the venomous virgins either?

It was written about in the Ancient Indian medical compendium, 'Sushruta Samhita'. You can read about it in an easier format in a book by Guido Majno ('The Healing Hand: Man and Wound in the Ancient World').

"The poor old man could hardly walk. He had been an elephant driver as far back as he could remember, lately also in the service of the king, but nothing like this had ever happened. His bottom, thighs, and groins were covered with eruptions - red, hot, painful boils, some as open sores. And he shook with fever. This was a serious problem. The elephant had probably been poisoned, so as to poison the king...."


Hilary Custance at 10:41 on 17 April 2003  Report this post
I think this is a terrific poem. I love the waty it is all in the subjunctive (or do I mean conditional), so that as you read you are simultaneously agreeing or questioning or providing an alternative scenario. I love the juxstaposition of the bleakest moments (suicide) with words like 'giggles' and unlikely notions with montrous names 'Altruistic elephants'. (You know that some game wardens on a reserve in Africa are currently puzzled about the motives of some wild elephants who unlatched a gate to release a herd of deer?)
Most of all, I love that it is serious, yet light. Cheers, Hilary

Jibunnessa at 10:45 on 17 April 2003  Report this post
Sounds like altruism at its best.

Cheers for the wonderful comments Hilary.

PantsonFire at 20:34 on 31 May 2006  Report this post
this is really good


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