Login   Sign Up 



 
Archive » Bobo » Work
Archive »  Poetry » General » Work

Drowning in naivety

by Bobo 

Posted: 08 August 2004
Word Count: 49
Font Size
 


Printable Version
Print Double spaced


This tell-tale tiredness -
a lethargy of spirit,
zapped by bitter regret.
I have not yet
served my time,
learned the requisite
lessons -
nor have I smelt
the sweet scent of rose.

Wake up! they yell
at my jaundiced features,
but the sand,
dearest friend,
consumes me
whole.







Favourite this work Favourite This Author


Comments by other Members



The Walrus at 13:32 on 09 August 2004  Report this post
Desolate poem Bobo with a sad resignation at the end.

Find the connection between the title and the poem somewhat elusive. I can see the drowning bit but where is the naivety?

Love: 'nor have I smelt
the sweet scent of rose.' - perhaps there is some hope in the 'yet'?

The Walrus
x
Helpful (0) Made Me Think (0) Made Me Smile (0) Pure Genius (0)

Bobo at 17:40 on 09 August 2004  Report this post
Thanks Walrus.

The naivety is about not learning from past mistakes, but rather preferring to see the world in a more idealistic sense...

BoBo x
Helpful (0) Made Me Think (0) Made Me Smile (0) Pure Genius (0)

olebut at 17:56 on 09 August 2004  Report this post
bobo very profound and yet beautiful

take care

david
Helpful (0) Made Me Think (0) Made Me Smile (0) Pure Genius (0)

Bobo at 20:52 on 10 August 2004  Report this post
David

Thanks. I'm trying really hard not to see the world through proverbial rose-tinted glasses, but at the same time am trying not to be depressingly cynical...a tough balance which led to this piece.

BoBo x
Helpful (0) Made Me Think (0) Made Me Smile (0) Pure Genius (0)

roovacrag at 22:13 on 10 August 2004  Report this post
Bobo

just right, to the point.

xx Alice
Helpful (0) Made Me Think (0) Made Me Smile (0) Pure Genius (0)


To post comments you need to become a member. If you are already a member, please log in .

 






Other work by Bobo:      ...view all work by Bobo