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A Lie
Posted: 28 May 2003
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If you should die
Do not expect tears
Not from me
Anger perhaps
A scream against the pain of being left
Alone
But tears?
Not a single one
In a million years
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 roger at 11:42 on 28 May 2003
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Well that's a bit harsh, Steve! But I see what you're saying - left alone without warning is a dreadful thing and almost bound to make you bitter. And what makes it worse, the tears will come, however hard you try to fight them.
Good stuff.
ps - when are you going to get involved in the humour group? Olebut and Jib are ripping me to pieces....I need help, a bit of support!!
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llydstp at 12:06 on 28 May 2003
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Thanks Roger
I suppose the words do seem to be a bit harsh, but the title of the poem, "A Lie," paradoxically, tells the truth about the real feelings being expressed.
Perhaps it is a failing of the poem that it relies on its title to get the message across.
What do others think about titles being used in this way?
Steve
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roger at 12:16 on 28 May 2003
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Steve, as I so often do, I made a mess of expressing my thoughts. The 'harsh' comment was a bad joke, and the poem clearly expressed 'the lie' without the title's help...hence my more serious 'bitter' and 'tears will come anyway' comments. I do apologise if my badly put thoughts caused you to doubt the poem...it was excellent (and very moving) and did exactly what you asked of it; so please leave it alone, title and all. It doesn't fail at all,or rely on the title; it succeeds magnificently.
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llydstp at 12:48 on 28 May 2003
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Roger
You really are too kind. Come on, try being nasty for once!
Seriously, your words are much appreciated.
As far as the Humour group goes, I think you are doing a pretty good job of defending yourself, but I will be entering the arena as soon as I have polished my shield and removed the rust from my trusty sword.
Steve
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roger at 13:23 on 28 May 2003
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Me nasty? Meeeee nasty? I'm not big enough, Steve - which is another reason I need your help in the humour group; I'm going under!!!!!
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Ioannou at 20:06 on 10 September 2003
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This has been playing on my mind. It's almost like part of a song. I think you should write the versus and find an angry but intelligent band to sing it. It has beautiful timing. Love, Maria.
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llydstp at 20:09 on 10 September 2003
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Maria
Thank you - much appreciated. As a musician myself, I find the task of finding an intelligent band somewhat daunting!
Love,
Steve.
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Ellenna at 22:39 on 10 September 2003
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thank you Maria for pointing me to this poem.. Steve its moving... and the title makes it even more poignant !
Ellie
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Fearless at 18:55 on 04 March 2004
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Steve
This reminds me of how we sometimes push away those we love the most. Very thought (read: heart) provoking.
fearless
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