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Nightingale
Posted: 30 July 2004
Word Count: 55
Summary: Nothing personal, just an observation.
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I worked to buy her DVDs,
designer clothes,
expensive things.
I took a pride in all the hours
I spent at work,
was arrogant
despite the guilt it brings.
And now, too late, I realise
that all my time
was precious, not
for monetary reasons,
but because my daughter sings.
.... and I never listened.
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 Nell at 16:25 on 30 July 2004
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Joanie, exactly as Fearless says so succinctly. This made me feel quite odd - I keep casting my mind back. It seems too exact not to be true, although I know that poets can write fiction. Another memorable one.
Nell.
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 joanie at 18:38 on 30 July 2004
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Woz, Nell and Poems, Thank you for your responses. I'm glad it struck a chord.
In addition to the obvious, I was inspired, I think, by a favourite poem, Going Without Saying by Bernard O'Donoghue. The final lines are, At least I didn't neglect to tell/The thrush how beautifully she sings."
Appreciated your reading.
joanie
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 roovacrag at 19:23 on 30 July 2004
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Joan.
Your nightingale will always sing for you.
Over and over again.
Hey she is your cherub with a voice of a nightingale.
Now you are singing her praises and we are all enjoying the music of a beautiful voice.
Wish we could hear the tone and song of such a beauty.
xxxxxxx Alice
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olebut at 10:58 on 01 August 2004
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Joanie
so often we through necessity do we miss much of our children's growing years this remind us of how sad that loss is
poignant and ery effective
take care
david
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joanie at 22:27 on 01 August 2004
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Many thanks, Alice, David and The Walrus.
This wasn't a personal thing really, although I often find myself wondering what are the important things in life; most of the time I know that I haven't got it right.
You're right - devastating.
Thanks again. joanie
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peterxbrown at 22:00 on 02 August 2004
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Wonderfully poignant and beautiffully constructed with a touching message. Loved it!
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miffle at 01:36 on 04 August 2004
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I really notice the verb tense changes in this poem. Used to moving effect! Nikki
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miffle at 01:38 on 04 August 2004
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Joanie, a further thought: perhaps just 'Nightingale' as a title (?)for to me the poem speaks the adjective... (?) Nikki
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joanie at 06:47 on 04 August 2004
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Thank you Nikki. Yes, I think you're right re. the title. I've changed it.
joanie
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