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Who are you?

by Stacey 

Posted: 26 May 2003
Word Count: 114
Summary: Well, here is my second attempt at poetry. I am pretty sure I'm doing it wrong, but to be honest, how you see it on the page, words and structure, is exactly how it comes out of my heart. And in my opinion, that's what poetry is. Like I previously said, I dont mind criticism, I am very new to this! Thank you.

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You are so wrong for me
In every way
But why does my heart tell me different?

Personalities clash,
Immaturity oozes from you

You are everything I donít need
And I am clearly not what you want

You desire change
I crave security
So why must we find ourselves so regularly
Meeting in the middle

Blinded by lust

If only I could see past your exterior
I wish I could turn you inside out
And reveal all I have ever wanted to know

A mystery to me you will always remain
Yet it is the mystery itself

That just seems to draw me closer
And closer




Head fuck.

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roger at 15:42 on 26 May 2003  Report this post
It's me, Stacy, Roger....you remember, don't you? I think the 'head fuck' comment was a bit harsh, I was doing my best, honest.

But seriously, I agree whole-heartedly....if it comes from the heart, it's poetry, and I liked it, so keep at it.

Stacey at 18:01 on 26 May 2003  Report this post
Hi Roger,

Thank you for your comments. I know, that part was meant to be very harsh, I was uncomfortable writing it, but felt I really wanted to capture the readers attention right at the end. In short, that line portrayed the emotions I was trying to get out, better than the rest of the poem. Does that make sense?!

Anyway, thank you, I really appreciate you taking the time to read my work.

All the best,

roger at 18:48 on 26 May 2003  Report this post
Yes, Stac, it makes perfect sense, and I was just pulling your leg. That line (you know, the rude one) was perfect, and it did exactly what you wanted it to do.....great!

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