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But I`m Blind

by laurafraser 

Posted: 28 July 2004
Word Count: 191

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But I'm Blind.

look at that girl,
did you see her lick the peacockís feathers
whilst twiddling a Samuraiís sword?

look at that girl,
is she iconic?
like a geisha with amnesia, drinking
margaritas' at dawn.

swivel your head
your pineapple head
pimpled skin and stiff dead hair,
oh do you see me here, slouched on this stolen throne?
But if we work together
(will you look at the girl?)
and promise not to eclipse
your pedigree.
I do.

my diamond is dying,
privilege is worthless
and I dream of a place all alone.
believe me.
Perceive (of) me.
listen to these (thoughtless) words,
because remember,
remember about the bridge that can snap,
but thereís a part of me
a part of you
(and her)
that wants to, would like to,
because it has to,
want the other thing,
the other side
of this abyss.
Hiss and iíll kiss you
but iíll always miss you.
lips to lips pressed deep
she you and I have gone mad
and him and her and them and me
gone mad.

But I like it this way.
This is the way (today), that I like.

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deblet at 20:16 on 28 July 2004  Report this post
brilliant! i think you've got something really special laura, a really wild mind. Your words almost transcend meaning they plunge so far into unconscious territory, yet meaning is precariously maintained and much feeling is conveyed as a result.

keep writing!


Fearless at 20:30 on 28 July 2004  Report this post
Excellent roller coaster language and big dipper expression.

Write on, Fearless

laurafraser at 09:53 on 29 July 2004  Report this post
Deblet and Fearless thank-you for your very generous comments-I find it terrifying looking at people's comments, so is always a heart calmer when one is greeted with remarks such as yours

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