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Like Our Love

by poemsgalore 

Posted: 26 July 2004
Word Count: 89
Summary: Wonder if this could be a bit bluesy, or maybe even jazz?


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Like Our Love

Itís the same sky
above me now
as when I first
met you by the fountain;
saw your sparkling eyes.
Itís greyer now,
with thicker clouds.
Stormy - like our love.
Yes, itís the same sky -
but not the same me.

Itís the same tree
you sit beneath
as when you first
told me you love me;
asked me to marry you.
Itís taller now,
and bears no fruit.
Sterile - like our love.
Yes, itís the same tree -
but not the same you.






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Jumbo at 19:00 on 26 July 2004  Report this post
Oh Kathleen,

This started off so beautifully and then became so sad!

And with such great images!

Itís taller now,/and bears no fruit./Sterile - like our love. Sad - but lovely.

Bluesy, I think, slow and remoresful.

Wonderful stuff

jumbo

roovacrag at 20:11 on 26 July 2004  Report this post
Kathleen.. thought Jazz Now I think blues,

Billie halliday singing it.

Humming a tune now. Great one.

Love the words ,so perfect.
xx Alice

joanie at 21:20 on 26 July 2004  Report this post
poems, a great song. Lovely words.

joanie

olebut at 22:08 on 26 July 2004  Report this post
Kathleen

the story of so many lives sadly, not sure I see it as a blues and perhaps the phrasiology would need some slight amendment to make it work as a lyric but the words are beautiful none the less

take care my firend

david x

poemsgalore at 18:12 on 27 July 2004  Report this post
Billie Holliday, if only, what a great jazz and blues singer she was. thanks all for the morale boost, song writing is new to me so every little crumb is savoured.

Noodles at 12:39 on 29 July 2004  Report this post
It's so 'simple' and yet intricate, like the best lyrics, I think. Very 'singable' and full of the 'exquisite sadness' that's (in my opinion)a vital part of our humanity.

well done

All the best

Pete


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