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Early summer by the apple tree
Posted: 22 July 2004 Word Count: 104 Summary: A response to Mary Oliver's 'Heron Rises From The Dark, Summer Pond', studied in Poetry Seminar this week.
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I wonder how they seem to start from nothing, forming themselves in secret places until they emerge, fully-formed miniatures, as they are today.
Immature and insignificant fruits which have only rain, though often fierce, and earth, though seldom rich, and sun, though even that not essential to help them through life.
Remember so few weeks ago how it stood, as if deprived of life yet determined to live. Its dark denuded branches twisted into a wry smile of one who knows
that surely Spring follows Winter and Summer Spring - Death follows Life and Life Death. Return in Autumn and taste its perfect fruits.
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Sascha at 20:07 on 22 July 2004
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Joanie,
I'm not familiar with the exercise (I need to get on reading some back forum comments, I know) but just a comment as a reader - I love pieces that make me look again at something that has been in front of my eyes my whole life that I never really saw. This made me walk into my backyard, tilt my head at the little apples and say "Huh" ;). I enjoyed it, S
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joanie at 20:17 on 22 July 2004
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Thanks Sascha! That was a quick response - much appreciated.
joanie
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fireweed at 08:56 on 23 July 2004
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joanie, I like this very much especially the last two verses and the lines :
its dark denuded branches
twisted into a wry smile
of one who knows |
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You made the apple tree an object of wonder and also linked the experience, as Mary Oliver would have, to human experience, in this case, of the seasons, Lfe and Death.
A really interesting response. You have inspired me to try one - need to think a little first.
fireweed.
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joanie at 09:13 on 23 July 2004
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fireweed, thank you. Glad you found it interesting.
I am just deciding whether to change see its perfect fruit to taste its perfect fruit
I think I will. Thanks again,
joanie
<Added>
oops fruits
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Nell at 11:59 on 23 July 2004
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joanie, I read this last night but wanted to read again before commenting. It's even better on second reading. I think you've tuned in beautifully to the tone and content of Mary Oliver's work, yet the poem is strangely your own. I love the way you've thought yourself into the apple tree - 'one who knows...' so much, more than we do in fact. I shall have to try too, but I'm not ready yet.
Nell.
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joanie at 14:47 on 23 July 2004
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Thank you, Nell, for your response and your thoughts. I look forward to yours, as always.
joanie
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deblet at 20:04 on 24 July 2004
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Hi Joanie
This is lovely. I liked the life/death circular theme. It made me feel a longing for my childhood garden and the large apple tree that was a house, a steady arm for our swing, blossom in the spring, apples stored in the attic in autumn, apple crumble in the winter. A place of shade and solace. So many things, you've brought it all back.
deblet
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joanie at 09:34 on 25 July 2004
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Thank you deblet. Glad you enjoyed it and thanks for responding.
joanie
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Account Closed at 08:59 on 26 July 2004
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Hi Joanie,
Really liked this poem and now have the wonderful image of apples in my head on a dreary Monday morning.
Especially liked the final stanza.
Ste
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LONGJON at 00:48 on 29 July 2004
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G'day Joanie,
Thoroughly agree with Nell - I saw this as an analogy to childhood, growing up - lovely relaxed use of language, great rhythm and rhyme. Much enjoyed.
John P.
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gard at 00:26 on 04 August 2004
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Hi Joanie
I thought I had commented on this but I don;t think I had.
such a lovely piece!! I think you captured the spirituality really well in your own style. I really look the first stanza. This piece is so well formed and well rounded (like an apple ha ha) its gorgeous!
G
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