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Just jagged around the edges

by Bobo 

Posted: 22 July 2004
Word Count: 63
Summary: About a guy...


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Tumultuous black hole
of unchartered emotions,
a journey
of trepidation
made on tooth-pick legs.

Wrong time.
Wrong place.

Yet you couldn't be
more right.

You are so familiar to me -
I know you,
I feel,
just as I know myself.
I've felt the soft dark
pain of your fear as
I kissed your tender skin,
and tasted the tears
of tortured vulnerability.






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roovacrag at 19:57 on 22 July 2004  Report this post
BOBO..disturbing poem.

Wrong time
wrong place.

Maybe wrong man.

Yet what is the wrong or right man?
we never know till we live with them.

Most women on their wedding day think...is he Mr right? I know i did.

xx Alice

Chem at 21:57 on 22 July 2004  Report this post
Oh my goodness Bobo! What an amazing poem - so raw, dripping with feeling and emotion.
I really admire your use of language:
I've felt the soft dark
pain of your fear

You express yourself in poetry so eloquently and with style.
I can feel the torture and the pain.

Incredibly moving Lisa.

Em

Account Closed at 20:28 on 24 July 2004  Report this post
Hi Bobo,

What an intense poem! I could feel the electricity in this, I was like charged reading it, you know what I mean?

Contrasting emotions and great use of imagery in this piece. It's one that I'll remember.

Ste
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