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Cold light of day

by pene 

Posted: 25 May 2003
Word Count: 55
Summary: sometimes this is what it feels like to have a mental illness.
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The sun's warm rays
Cascade through
Partially drawn curtains
At dawn.
She recognises their presence
As she rouses from
Disturbed phantasm.
Earth's summer caress
Reaches to embrace chilled
Early morning skin.
Beach and woodland beckon
She fails to hear their call.
The voices scream her difference
As the cold light of day
Chills her soul.






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olebut at 19:10 on 25 May 2003  Report this post
again you achieve so much in so few words
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peterxbrown at 02:13 on 16 September 2003  Report this post
Thank you for drawing my attention to
" Cold Light of Day", you are right! I do like it a lot and think the split lines are most effective. I would still like to see you rip completely loose in one poem and use stream of conciousness effects and messed up word reactions to depict the bipolar affective disorder.
That is not a criticism, it is just one of your many fans being over demanding and very selfish!! love and respect peterb xxx
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