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Mistress Waki Sashi
Posted: 07 July 2004
Word Count: 60
Summary: Another Short poem from my book of 'Songs of the Samurai'
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Mistress Waki Sashi
Silence
Awaiting my tender summons
A gasp of release, a glimmer of silver
She emerges from her sculptured bed
Materialise with sinuous grace my love
Iridescent her passage
Her kiss for another
A gift of rapture
She weeps for her actions
Wipe away her scarlet tears
Exhale of belonging
My mistress slips quietly beside me once more
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 roovacrag at 18:44 on 07 July 2004
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Sam.WOW..Yes i liked this a lot.
Loved the last line......
My mistress slips quietly beside me once more.
Passion in all its glory.
Well done.
Alicexx
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roovacrag at 18:44 on 07 July 2004
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Sam.WOW..Yes i liked this a lot.
Loved the last line......
My mistress slips quietly beside me once more.
Passion in all its glory.
Well done.
Alicexx
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Sam Rix at 20:03 on 07 July 2004
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Hi Alice,
Thanks a lot for the vote, I got goose bumps writing this one.
Putting myself in place of the ronin and visualising the oneness of warrior and his sword, seeing this as remote momentary fragments in a duel was intense.
My only quibble is the second to last line;
‘Exhale of belonging’
In my mind there was a duality of the warrior’s breath after success in the battle and also the return of the blade into its scabbard excising air from that scabbard. I chose the sword, as the more subtle image, I’m not sure the Katana into the scabbard has been done justice here…
What do you think?
Love and luck
Sam X
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roovacrag at 20:27 on 07 July 2004
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Sam.
Think you should write another about the knights of old.
Warrior with sword in hand fighting for his mistress.
Think you could pull this one off.
Go for it.
XX Alice
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Sazmac at 18:57 on 08 July 2004
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Sam,
thought this was wonderful. agree with alice... go forth!
saz x
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Sam Rix at 22:07 on 08 July 2004
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Hi Ladies,
Thank you for the confidence, I truly appreciate.
I will take your suggestion for 'knights' and bring it to the table in a little while.
Love and luck to you and yours
Sam
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Sam Rix at 23:58 on 08 July 2004
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Alice, Saz,
If you'll pardon the pun, I've played with it and have a little something for you to have a peak at. (Oh bugger, did it again!)
Any way it’s labelled as provisionally 'knight’. See what you think so far and please give me your thoughts.
Love
Sam x
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Sam Rix at 22:58 on 30 August 2004
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Hi Mike,
thanks for that, I appreciate it.
One for the final Songs of the Samurai book I think.
Love and Luck
Sam
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