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4000 Miles Away
Posted: 13 June 2004
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I’m home
Alone
She’s not here.
4000 miles away but I feel her
I smell her
I know her
She’s not here.
She calls
She’s here
But she’s not.
4000 miles away and I can taste her
I kiss her
I want her
She’s not here.
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 roovacrag at 12:04 on 13 June 2004
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Baldur,welcome to WW.
Short and to the point.Get the feeling this is the love of your life and your missing her like hell.
Yes you feel,breathe,smell her wherever you go around the house.
Only when you hear her voice is she with you in spirit.
Well done.
xx Alice
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miffle at 13:03 on 13 June 2004
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Baldur, 'She's here' 'She's not here' 'She's here' 'She's not here': telephones - hmmm... how do they connect us?! Sometimes, I don't feel they connect us at all!
Definitely, yes, they have limitations and I feel that that's your frustration here... And what does it mean to be 'with someone'? 'to be in someone's presence' ? The voice vanishes... were they really there at all? Telephones, mostly I hate them...
But your love seems to jump the distance... All the best, Miffle
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NB often I think that it is in the silences that people are here with us...
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baldur at 14:18 on 13 June 2004
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Wow, I didn't actually expect anyone to read this....it was simply an outpouring of emotion. But thank you both for your comments....and TY for the welcome Alice.
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 joanie at 23:46 on 13 June 2004
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Hi baldur, and welcome. So near and yet so far... you have successfully expressed how you can be so close even when miles away, yet so far apart. I liked it.
joanie
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gard at 01:12 on 17 June 2004
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Hi B
welcome to WW. I like this "outpouring" the transcendence of the now to or from the place where "she is". Love indeed.
Nice write
G
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